Pony pals

Pony pals

Hi all, this is my 1st story, plz comment what you thought. I don't care how bad you criticise me it will all help with my next book... Enjoy. P.s. this is my fan made story, it is not MLP. P.p.s. the pictures aren't any of my horses. I also use some pictures from MLP:FIM and these pictures are hasbros.

published on July 30, 2013completed

True colours.

True colours. The next morning Flash is woken up by Dash "hey cuz, it's nice to see ya." "Yeah, it is nice, I'll help at the farm, I gotta meet some pony 1st" Flash says as he stretches. "It's ok cuz, me an' Big Bill finished the mornin chores already, oh I made ya breakfast. Barley and wheat" "thanks Dash. You have grown up to be a vary pretty mare" "why thanks cuz" Dash says as she leaves the room.
As Flash races out the door he half yells "I'll be back this afternoon Dash". As Flash sours over the town he spots a chariot coming into maneton and gathers with everyponyelse, he hears some pony say "it's the princess!" The chariot soon lands and the princess steps out, every pony bows "I am looking for one called Flash" the princess announces, "m-me" Flash stutters "come here please" the princess says. As Flash walked up to the princess every pony made a path for him, as he walked her herd some pony mumble"I wonder how the princess knows him?" "Flash" the princess states "may we go someplace alone, I need to talk to you" "ah, sure. How's the farm?" Asks Flash. The princess replies, "Let us go there". When they arrive the princess speaks, "do you not remember me?" "Ah, no sorry princess" Flash horsely replies, princess Lilly replies "we went to ponycare and school as fowls" Flash thinks back, then remembers "I remember now, me and you were the last to get out cutie marks, and we were PFF's" princess Lilly smiles and nods "wow, look at how beautiful you are! Are you married?" Flash asks. "Not yet, this is why I have come to you" princess Lilly says "I'm here to invite you and your plus 1 to attend and help with the wedding", Flashes jaw hits the ground and he stutters "I, I am honoured princess" princess Lilly replies "thank you, and please call me Lilly, all my friends call me Lilly." After catching up princess Lilly departs.

A purple pony comes up to him "hi Flash, we meet before when u asked where the hall was" Flash replies, "yeah, hi" the purple pony continues "my name is pat purple. If I may, how do you and the princess know each other?" Flash replies grinning "we grew up together" pat looks stunned and stutters "c-cool" then continues "hey do you wanna hang out sometime?" "Sure" Flash chirps "I'll see you around, I'm late meeting some pony, bye" and trots off to his home.
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As Flash arrives he sees daisy and her father arguing, "you ungrateful little brat!" Daisy's father yells, and hoofs her in the head "honey! How dear you hoof Daisy!" Daisy's mother snaps at her husband. "Sir, I will not allow you to hurt a mare" Flash pipes in, Daisy's father turns and lunges at Flash but flash jumps out of the way, "Harold, stop!" Daisy's mother yells but Harold ignores her and lunges again this time hitting Flash "Flash!" Daisy screams. At that moment Big Bill is passing by and hears Daisy's scream and runs to help, he rams and pins Harold to the ground and says to Daisy's mother "ma'am go get help" And Daisys mother gallops off for help. Harold tried to wriggle free but Big Bill is too strong, Daisy canters over to Flash "flash are you ok?" Flash looks up at her and weakly replies "I think I am" as Flash lifts his head Daisy sees a deep cut on his head and gets a bandage to bandage it up, Daisy's mother returns with Princess Lilly AND prince Edward "Sir, by hoofing a mare and attacking another pony you are now under arrest" as the prince said this 2 royal guards grabbed and took Harold to the prison, "are you ok sis?" George says trotting out of line to his sister who replies "yes. I'll be fine" and walks her brother back in line. Prince Edward walks over to Flash and gently says "I was hopping not to meet you like this Flash" flash looks up, princess Lilly helps Flash up, Flash tries to bow but falls over, the prince smiles "no need to bow, you just need to stay in bed for a few days, we will pospone the wedding plans till your better" the prince looks at the sun "I'm sorry but I must be going. I have a meeting with my mother" the royals bid good day and fly off. Big bill carries Flash to his house "I'm so sorry about him" Daisy's mother apologises "he's never had any pony say no or talk up to him before" "it's ok, just glad daisy is alright" Flash smiles. Bill gentle puts Flash in his bed, Dash then bursts through the door "flash! What happened!" Big bill took her out of the room to explain. Flash turns to Daisy's mother "ma'am may I talk to Daisy alone please" she nods and leaves the room "Daisy" flash says "yes" Daisy replies with tears in her eyes, "I'm sorry for what happened" daisy calmly replies "it wasn't your fault" she then angrily spits out "it was my father, he thinks he's above all the rest" "he will learn a lesson one day, the hard way" Flash replied as he falls asleep.
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Wow, ottimo lavoro
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on December 18, 2013
Thank you
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on September 05, 2013
This was wonderful! I love it!
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on September 05, 2013
Sassymaker100 thank you. Check out Pony Pals: 2
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on August 19, 2013
Very good work bravo:)
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on August 19, 2013
GREAT WORK I <3 IT
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on August 11, 2013
Thank you SparrowClawFan
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on August 08, 2013
Wow this is amazing! I love it!!
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on August 08, 2013
Thank you Primcess_Twilight. I hope you enjoy the next book.
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on August 08, 2013
wow awesome its cool cause its long
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on August 08, 2013
Ah, finally finished! Uploading now...
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on August 04, 2013
I may not finish the book today. I was up late last night watching Jurassic park. I managed to write 1 chapter... Enjoy
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on August 03, 2013
Yay! Can't wait!
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on August 02, 2013
3 to 5 chapters remaining in pony pals. I will add them within 20 hours. I will then add a page called Firestar Stories, feel free to chat to me on there...
Again plz feel free to comment what you think, this is my 1st story so I'd like as much info to help with my next book. ;)
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on August 02, 2013
*ether
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on August 01, 2013
I will be writing the rest. I'm up to where I am. I will post the new chapter/chapters rather Saturday, Sunday, Monday (NZ date)
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on August 01, 2013
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on July 31, 2013
I'm about to add the 5th chapter... Plz comment on what I could do to make tho better and plz rate.
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on July 31, 2013
Thank you DragonFireGirl101:)
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on July 30, 2013
it is a very good story! Ill try to do a review on this ASAP! :D
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on July 30, 2013
This is my own twist to MLP. It's called Pony pals till I find a better name. :)
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on July 30, 2013
You should make more!
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on July 30, 2013
It's Manehatten, not Maneton... BUT IT'S VERY GOOD! I LOVE IT!
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on July 30, 2013