Pony pals

Pony pals

Hi all, this is my 1st story, plz comment what you thought. I don't care how bad you criticise me it will all help with my next book... Enjoy. P.s. this is my fan made story, it is not MLP. P.p.s. the pictures aren't any of my horses. I also use some pictures from MLP:FIM and these pictures are hasbros.

published on July 30, 2013completed

Flashes Parents

Flashes Parents
Flash is in bed for 2 weeks, one day Flash wakes up to see Pat enter the room "hey pat" Flash croaks "hey Flash, I herd what happened. You were vary brave" pat replies happily, Dash then enters the room "Ya still stand up for ponies ae cuz" she says"I'm mighty proud of ya, the way bill told me sounded like if he weren't there then y'all be in a comer, bet yall glad I married such a strong stallion" Flash laughs then groans in pain "I thought laughter was meant to be the best medicine" pat joked. Then all the ponies here a crowd outside, there was a knock on the door, Bill answers it "welcome p.." "Shh, I want to surprise Flash" the princess whispers, she then walks into the room "how are you feeling Flash?" All the ponies in the room bow and Flash replies "I'm getting better thank you Lilly" the princess smiles "when you can walk around again come visit me in Pony Palace" "I will" Flash replies. "I just stopped by before I return home, bye, get better soon" and then she leaves. Soon after all the ponies leave. Flash soon dozes off.

Back at Daisy's home daisy is really upset and in her room crying, there was a knock on the door, Daisy's mother answers it "oh, sorry were looking for Flash" one if the Pegasus says "no, you got the right place, I'm Violet Flashes flat mates mother" violet replies "Flash is at Dashes house at the moment, would you like to come in?" Both of Flashes parents nod and enter. "Hi my name is Rainbowflash" says the stallion "an I'm Raincloud" says the mare. "What brings you here?" Asks violet shifting her eyes uncomfortably. "Princess Lilly said that Flash needed us" Raincloud responded looking at violet curiously "why?" Asks Rainbowflash " oh no reason" violet says "I've seen that look, from one mother to another, what has happened to my son?" Raincloud says softly. Violet bursts into tears "I'm so sorry!" "There, there, what hap.." Raincloud started then Daisy walks into the room with a huge bruse on her head. "I'm sorry Mr. and Mrs. pegasy" Daisy says "what happened sugar?" Asks Raincoud "I don't wanna talk about it" daisy says "ok then. Can ya tell me what's happened to Flash?" Asks raincloud. Daisy replies "he was trying to protect me" daisy then begins to cry. Rainbowflash and raincloud look at each other then fear came into Rainbowflashes eyes and he gallops to big bill and dashes house. Raincloud comforts Violet and Daisy "can ya please tell me what..." There was a knock on the door "the d-doors op-open" daisy calls. Princess Lilly enters "ah, there you are Raincloud. I'm glad you got my letter" "what's happened to Flash?" Asks Raincloud. Princess Lilly puts her hoof on Rainclouds shoulder "He was in an accident, he will be fine he's just a bit battered" raincloud looks upset, "what, who, when?" Raincloud stutters. "Come, he is at dashes house" princess Lilly says and all 3 ponies head to dash and big bills.
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Wow, ottimo lavoro
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on December 18, 2013
Thank you
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on September 05, 2013
This was wonderful! I love it!
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on September 05, 2013
Sassymaker100 thank you. Check out Pony Pals: 2
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on August 19, 2013
Very good work bravo:)
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on August 19, 2013
GREAT WORK I <3 IT
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on August 11, 2013
Thank you SparrowClawFan
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on August 08, 2013
Wow this is amazing! I love it!!
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on August 08, 2013
Thank you Primcess_Twilight. I hope you enjoy the next book.
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on August 08, 2013
wow awesome its cool cause its long
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on August 08, 2013
Ah, finally finished! Uploading now...
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on August 04, 2013
I may not finish the book today. I was up late last night watching Jurassic park. I managed to write 1 chapter... Enjoy
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on August 03, 2013
Yay! Can't wait!
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on August 02, 2013
3 to 5 chapters remaining in pony pals. I will add them within 20 hours. I will then add a page called Firestar Stories, feel free to chat to me on there...
Again plz feel free to comment what you think, this is my 1st story so I'd like as much info to help with my next book. ;)
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on August 02, 2013
*ether
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on August 01, 2013
I will be writing the rest. I'm up to where I am. I will post the new chapter/chapters rather Saturday, Sunday, Monday (NZ date)
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on August 01, 2013
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on July 31, 2013
I'm about to add the 5th chapter... Plz comment on what I could do to make tho better and plz rate.
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on July 31, 2013
Thank you DragonFireGirl101:)
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on July 30, 2013
it is a very good story! Ill try to do a review on this ASAP! :D
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on July 30, 2013
This is my own twist to MLP. It's called Pony pals till I find a better name. :)
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on July 30, 2013
You should make more!
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on July 30, 2013
It's Manehatten, not Maneton... BUT IT'S VERY GOOD! I LOVE IT!
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on July 30, 2013