Pony pals

Pony pals

Hi all, this is my 1st story, plz comment what you thought. I don't care how bad you criticise me it will all help with my next book... Enjoy. P.s. this is my fan made story, it is not MLP. P.p.s. the pictures aren't any of my horses. I also use some pictures from MLP:FIM and these pictures are hasbros.

published on July 30, 2013completed

Good morning Maneton

Good morning Maneton The next morning Flash is woken by a knock on the door, Flash goes and opens the door. "Telegram for mr Flash" says the filly. "Yes that's me, hey aren't you, um, Gem?" Says Flash. "Yes, thanks for helping me yesterday Mr. Flash" says gem. "No problem, and its just Flash" flash replies as he smiles, Gem says "ok, would u like me to read it or would u?" "Go on, read it Gem" replies Flash. Gem clears her throat "Dear Son, I am hoping all is well in Maneton. If you have trouble finding a house your cousin Dash lives on the other side of town. XXX love mama. P.S. hope it's fine there, it's cold in Cloud land" Flash smiles, "wow, your from Cloud land" says Gem amazed "yeah, here gem here's a little something for your efforts" says Flash handing gem €5. "Wow thanks!" Says gem "bye" and trotted off. Flash closes the door and goes into the kitchen to make him and Daisy breakfast. Flash knocks on Daisy's door, "come in" daisy chirps. "Here's some clover with nector for breakfast" Flash says as he hands her, her breakfast. "Aw, thanks Flash" she replies. After she finishes Flash does the dishes, "right, we need to find jobs" daisy says reading mane weekly as she enters the kitchen. "There's a job here weather Pegasus needed" Daisy reads out "ok, let's go see" Flash says. The two Pegasus head to the hall. "Well hello" mayor grey greets "hello" both Pegasus reply "we're here for the weather job" Daisy says "oh good, we need you ASAP" the mayor says "when can you start?" "Now" Flash and Daisy reply "good. Cloudy!" The mayor calls "are you 2 here for the job?" Asks Cloudy. "Yes ma'am" Flash replies. "Good follow me" Cloudy instructs, after a long day cloudy says "it's a good thing you applied when u did, thank you". both Pegasus soon return home. Flash lights the fire and Daisy and him talk. "So... Do you have any siblings " asks Daisy "yes, I have a little sister named Snowstar. What about you?" Questions Flash "I have a older brother George" replys daisy, "where does he work?" Asks Flash "in the Pony Palace, he's Princess Lilly's royal guard Sargent" replies Daisy. They chat till its time for bed. as Daisy gets ready to get in bed there's a knock at the door "I got it!" Flash calls from down the hall, Flash opens the door "hello, is this Daisy's house?" Asks a Pegasus, "yes it is" Flash says "who have I the honor of asking?" "We are Daisy's parents" the pony stallion replies "are you..." The Pegasus mare starts "oh no, no were just flat mates ma'am" flash quickly replies "daisy! Your parents are here!" Daisy comes to the door, "mom! Dad! It's so nice to see you!" Daisy says as she hugs her parents "please come in" when they are all in the lounge Daisy asks "what brings you here?" Her father answers "we came to see if we could stay for a bit, our house was blown down" "you can stay as long as you want" flash says "but Flash where will u sleep?" Questions Daisy "I'll stay at my cousins" Flash says gayly "it'll give me a reason to visit, nice meeting you ma'am, sir" and Flash heads to his Cousins place.

"We'll sure ya can stay cuz, it's been ages since ya saw us. D'ya have a house?" Big Bill asks "yeah but I'm letting my flat mates parents stay in my room, thanks for letting me stay Big Bill" "no prob cuz. Ya can help out at the farm if ya like" big bill says as they both head to bed.
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Wow, ottimo lavoro
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on December 18, 2013
Thank you
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on September 05, 2013
This was wonderful! I love it!
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on September 05, 2013
Sassymaker100 thank you. Check out Pony Pals: 2
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on August 19, 2013
Very good work bravo:)
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on August 19, 2013
GREAT WORK I <3 IT
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on August 11, 2013
Thank you SparrowClawFan
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on August 08, 2013
Wow this is amazing! I love it!!
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on August 08, 2013
Thank you Primcess_Twilight. I hope you enjoy the next book.
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on August 08, 2013
wow awesome its cool cause its long
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on August 08, 2013
Ah, finally finished! Uploading now...
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on August 04, 2013
I may not finish the book today. I was up late last night watching Jurassic park. I managed to write 1 chapter... Enjoy
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on August 03, 2013
Yay! Can't wait!
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on August 02, 2013
3 to 5 chapters remaining in pony pals. I will add them within 20 hours. I will then add a page called Firestar Stories, feel free to chat to me on there...
Again plz feel free to comment what you think, this is my 1st story so I'd like as much info to help with my next book. ;)
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on August 02, 2013
*ether
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on August 01, 2013
I will be writing the rest. I'm up to where I am. I will post the new chapter/chapters rather Saturday, Sunday, Monday (NZ date)
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on August 01, 2013
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on July 31, 2013
I'm about to add the 5th chapter... Plz comment on what I could do to make tho better and plz rate.
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on July 31, 2013
Thank you DragonFireGirl101:)
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on July 30, 2013
it is a very good story! Ill try to do a review on this ASAP! :D
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on July 30, 2013
This is my own twist to MLP. It's called Pony pals till I find a better name. :)
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on July 30, 2013
You should make more!
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on July 30, 2013
It's Manehatten, not Maneton... BUT IT'S VERY GOOD! I LOVE IT!
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on July 30, 2013