Pony pals

Pony pals

Hi all, this is my 1st story, plz comment what you thought. I don't care how bad you criticise me it will all help with my next book... Enjoy. P.s. this is my fan made story, it is not MLP. P.p.s. the pictures aren't any of my horses. I also use some pictures from MLP:FIM and these pictures are hasbros.

published on July 30, 2013completed

Ying-yang

Ying-yang As Daisy and Flash walk through town with Flame and Daffodil in there carriage. DJ-colt greets them and has a look at the babies. "They are cute. If you ever need a party with music give me a call and I'll come, I'll give you 10 years free music." Daisy kisses him on the cheek, "thanks DJ-colt." And they carry on walking. They get to the farm and dash greets them, "howdy. Nice to see y'all. I have some bad news an' great news but Big Bill Donno the good news yet." When inside Flash takes out Flame and Daffodil and put them on the floor, he then changes Daffodil. Dash starts, "  the bad news is I can't have a baby." Daisy hugs her, "I'm so sorry." Dash continues, "the good news is me an big bill are adoptin a little filly, and I got a letter today sayin that we passed the test so will have her in a month or so." Flash finishes changing daffodil and says, "I'm glad. What will you two name it?" . Dash replies, "that's what me an bill gotta talk about soon." At that moment Big Bill comes in and asks, "what have we gotta talk about soon." And gets on the floor and plays with the kids. Dash smiles, "we got a le'er from the orphanage... We are able to adopt her." Big Bill jumps up and Hugs dash. "Yehaw! I know the perfect name." He pauses then continues "I thought we'd call her Lickity split." Dash smiles, "that's a gorgeous name."

Flash slinks onto the couch after putting the fowls to bed. Daisy smiles, "so... The fowls are asleep." Flash nods. Daisy sighs "there's something I gotta tell you Flash." Flash looks at Daisy and ushers her to continue, "there's something I never told you, I was scared you would shun me for it." Flash looks into Daisy's eyes, "I would never shun any pony for anything." Daisy smiles and continues, "the reason Doctor corn didn't want any pony else in there was cause I have a heart condition." Flash just smiles at daisy, "Daisy. I don't care how you are, where you came from, and what you have, you are a sweet, gentle, caring mare. And I fell in love cause you are a mare that comes once in a lifetime." Daisy smiles and they kiss. After a while Flash speaks, "daisy, I got a heart condition to, it slipped my mind after all that happened." Daisy half smiles, "well it hasn't exactly been a smooth run for you." Flash nods in agreement.

Flashes IPony rings, he walks off to answer it. He soon comes back looking upset. Daisy looks at him and asks, "what's wrong Flash." Flash tries to find his words then manages to reply, "that was Big Bill..." Hearing his tone daisy braces herself as he continues, "my father he.." Flash bursts into tears crying. Daisy comforts him. Flash manages to finish, "has cancer!" Daisy is taken back she thinks 'how can such a strong, fit stallion get sick so fast.' At that moment Violet walks in, "what's happened Flash." Daisy looks up from Flash and answers, "his father has cancer." Violet gasps, "does Raincloud know." Flash replies "no, she is in Pony Palace with Lilly." Violet nods and sits on the other side of Flash. "Itll be ok son, your father is a strong Pony." There's a knock on the door, Violet gets up and opens it, Harold is standing there. Violet coldly says, "What do you want." Harold surprisingly replies in a gentle tone, "I was in town and I heard about Mr. Pegasy, may I come in." Flash calls, "You may come in." Harold enters and sits in a chair, "I'd like to apologise for attacking you like that, I had no right to hit a mare ether and I'd like to make up for it, ill give you the money for Mr. Pegasy's treatment." Flashes eyes light up, "you would do that for me." Harold nods, "you'd better go tell your father." Flash nods and then Harold leaves. Violet grabs her coat and says, "I'll go find Doctor Corn." And trots out the door. Soon after she leaves Flash gets up to leaves then asks, "will you be ok with the kids." Daisy nods and kisses him before he leaves.
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At the Pony Palace as the princess and Raincloud are talking. Snow star is playing in the garden when  prince Edward walks by, "Snow star, would you like to do something for me." Snow star beams, "yes sir!" The prince smiles, "would you please take a chariot, go to Cloud land to take your friends out for the day." Snow star's eyes light up, "that would be great" before she bounces off the prince gives her a note (for the day you are to take Snow star anywhere she wants) Snow star hugs the prince then gallops off. The prince watches her go of and sighs 'I wish I had a filly or colt of my own'

"I have got some good news." The princess says, Raincloud looks at her and the princess continues, "I'm pregnant. And when it gets to the stage when I gotta stop working I'd like you to take over for the 5 months." Raincloud bows and manages only two words, "thanks Lilly."

Prince Edward walks in, as he does Raincloud gets up whispers "good luck" in princess Lilly's ear then leaves. The princess speaks, "Edward I got the best news you could want." The princes ears perk up, Princess Lilly continues, "well, for a while iv seen you watch filly's and colts play around in Maneton and around Pony Palace, I saw what you did for Snow star just before as well, the news is... Well I'm pregnant." The prince listening face grows to a smile as wide as a mile, "wow. Wow, I, I'm gonna be a dad." The royals then kiss.

There's a knock on the Royal lounge door, the princess replies, "you may enter." George walks in and salutes the royals then speaks, "have you seen Mrs. Pegasy, I have some grave news." Princess Lilly and prince Edwards smiles dissolve, "what is the news George." George look grave as he replies, "it's... He... Its Rainbowflash... He has stage 4 cancer." The princess nods for her husband to leave and talk to George, the prince walks with George and as they leave princess Lilly says, "I'll tell Raincloud." At that moment Harold canters into the room "sorry to barge in like this your majesty" he says bowing. "But I heard about Mr. Pegasy, I am vary sorry for hurting Flash so I have offered to pay for the treatment." The princess looks at him and sadly replies, "your offer is vary generous... But his cancer is at stage 4. There is no cure... I." Princess Lilly crys. Then continues, "I have to find a way to break it to Raincloud." Harold nods gravely and a guard shows him the door. As he leaves the room he says, "I hope you both stay strong."

Princess Lilly finds Raincloud making cloud shapes, she goes to join her. As the princess sits next to Raincloud, Raincloud sees her dark emotion and asks, "I'm sorry Lilly, I thought he would be read.." The princess interrupts her, "it's not him, he was beaming when I told him... I.. I Donno how to put this." Raincloud looks at the princess, princess Lilly continues, "it's rainbow... He." She then slumps down on the cloud. Raincloud comforts her, then the princess continues, "he has stage 4 cancer." Raincloud let it sink in then her and princess Lilly flat to the hospital.
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Wow, ottimo lavoro
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on December 18, 2013
Thank you
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on September 05, 2013
This was wonderful! I love it!
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on September 05, 2013
Sassymaker100 thank you. Check out Pony Pals: 2
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on August 19, 2013
Very good work bravo:)
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on August 19, 2013
GREAT WORK I <3 IT
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on August 11, 2013
Thank you SparrowClawFan
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on August 08, 2013
Wow this is amazing! I love it!!
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on August 08, 2013
Thank you Primcess_Twilight. I hope you enjoy the next book.
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on August 08, 2013
wow awesome its cool cause its long
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on August 08, 2013
Ah, finally finished! Uploading now...
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on August 04, 2013
I may not finish the book today. I was up late last night watching Jurassic park. I managed to write 1 chapter... Enjoy
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on August 03, 2013
Yay! Can't wait!
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on August 02, 2013
3 to 5 chapters remaining in pony pals. I will add them within 20 hours. I will then add a page called Firestar Stories, feel free to chat to me on there...
Again plz feel free to comment what you think, this is my 1st story so I'd like as much info to help with my next book. ;)
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on August 02, 2013
*ether
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on August 01, 2013
I will be writing the rest. I'm up to where I am. I will post the new chapter/chapters rather Saturday, Sunday, Monday (NZ date)
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on August 01, 2013
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on July 31, 2013
I'm about to add the 5th chapter... Plz comment on what I could do to make tho better and plz rate.
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on July 31, 2013
Thank you DragonFireGirl101:)
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on July 30, 2013
it is a very good story! Ill try to do a review on this ASAP! :D
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on July 30, 2013
This is my own twist to MLP. It's called Pony pals till I find a better name. :)
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on July 30, 2013
You should make more!
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on July 30, 2013
It's Manehatten, not Maneton... BUT IT'S VERY GOOD! I LOVE IT!
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on July 30, 2013