Chosen

Chosen

Every five years one child from each family 10-18 is chosen because of their abilities and Amethyst Brite is one of these. She must find out what element she controls and survive the Element Testing.

published on May 04, 2014completed

Let Down

Let Down ARIA'S POV

"We..." I started. The Elementor raised an eyebrow and looked at Dawn. She was looking down. "As I expected." He said. The Fire Elementor walked up to them as well. He had a big bruise on his face from all the falls. "I'm sorry." Dawn whispered. I held my breath knowing we where going to be punished. Instead, the Fire Elementor's eyes brightened and he spoke. "You two have improved a whole lot." He said coldly. I let out a sigh of relief. "But." Spoke the Earth Elementor. "They shall still be punished." He grinned wickedly. I instantly disliked the guy. "They can no longer be roommates." Said the Fire Elementor. My jaw dropped. It had been almost a week! I had gotten used to Dawn being my roommate! "But—" i started. "If you win a duel maybe I'll reconsider." He replied. Then they left. Dawn and I where left standing there.

AIRION'S POV

"I am SO ready for duels!" I told Dawn as we trained. "Cool." She answered dryly. There was something defiantly wrong... I didn't want to get involved, so I didn't talk and kept training. "Sorry." Dawn finally said. "It's just... I kinda got in trouble this morning." I looked the other way. "Why?" I asked. "You don't have to answer that." I added quickly. She laughed for the first time in the entire day. "Aria and I... Kinda ran away from an Elementor after accidentally spying on him..." Dawn explained. "Sounds to me that you've become a professional trouble maker!" I laughed. "You can put it that way..." She said. She made a circle of water around her hands as she talked. "Come on!" I said. "You're so like... Not you today!" I told her. "I know." She said. The Dawn walked away to the building.

DAWN'S POV

I ran into my now empty dorm crying. I had been so mean to Airion, AND I had gotten Aria in trouble. Aria's side of the dorm was completely empty. It was all my fault. I would probably end up versing her in a duel or something. Duels started in two days. I laid down on my bed and dried my tears. I had let two of my best friends down.
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Is anyone else reminded of Divergent?
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I wrote this before I knew divergent existed
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on September 29, 2014
not anymmore. its marked as completed
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on September 28, 2014
You know you can actually edit what's alredy there, right?
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on September 28, 2014
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on September 28, 2014
thanks! i'm gonna make an edited version that's longer and has no pov switches and is less cheesy
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on September 28, 2014
Wow. So basically you came up with a storyline as good as one that millions of people have read, that's really amazing. Great job! All the switching POVs are kind of confusing
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on September 28, 2014
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on September 28, 2014
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on September 28, 2014
-CHOSEN-
remembering Chosen with 72 readers, but only 20 chapters. Released's first chapter is in!

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yay!who thumbed this down btw
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on August 31, 2014
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on August 31, 2014
Awesome story! Though you might want to add some paragraph breaks in the first chapter ;)
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:3 thanks and yea
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on August 17, 2014
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on August 01, 2014
Love this story!
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Reply to comments here. You can even reply to replies, but it will look weird. Qfeasters have to get used to it.
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Ok then...
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on July 12, 2014
sorry. recording this
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on July 12, 2014
What? I'm confused
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on July 12, 2014
see?
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on July 12, 2014
Like this
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on July 12, 2014
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on July 12, 2014
I Loved the Whole Thing, its so fascinating and like a proper book. I hope you become an author when you become older because I would surely read your books
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Aww!! Thanks
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on July 01, 2014
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on June 30, 2014
Awesome
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on June 24, 2014
I really like this! This is pretty much exactly what I want in a book!
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Thanks :D
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on June 16, 2014
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on June 16, 2014
Super cool! It was awese from the beginning!
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*awesome
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Thanks! :)
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on June 13, 2014
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on June 13, 2014
:D I hope you enjoyed it
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on June 08, 2014
Awesome!
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on June 04, 2014
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on May 31, 2014
I must say, that you had a amazing beginning makingdreaders(like me) want to read more, the chapters between were full of actions si readers didnt get bored. The chapters were quite long (which I like) and you also had a amazing finish
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My first ones are about my roleplay characters/my friends' characters, biographies, last known locations, that sort of thing. Then after I'm done with all that, I will be writing the roleplay out (Some character's names were forgotten, so I had to create new names for the forgotten ones, lol)
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on May 26, 2014
yay Magic is there!!! :D
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on May 26, 2014
amazing finish!
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on May 24, 2014
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on May 22, 2014
Honestly crystal, these are amazing!
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on May 22, 2014
Wow o_o Take me a couple of days to read then x
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on May 22, 2014
20 it think
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on May 21, 2014
How Many Chapters Is There Crystal? x
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on May 21, 2014
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on May 21, 2014
Amazin' x
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on May 21, 2014
:D anytime
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on May 20, 2014
^_^ Np
I'm just grateful that you added me in it etc
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on May 20, 2014
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on May 20, 2014
Nah its fine
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on May 20, 2014
Srry, just that sequels don't really get as much attention as the actual story
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on May 20, 2014
No sequel
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on May 20, 2014
WRITE A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WRITE.A.SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I NEED A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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SEQUEL TIME XD XD XD
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on May 19, 2014
Sometimes i did want to make a sequel, but meh
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on May 19, 2014
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