Chosen

Chosen

Every five years one child from each family 10-18 is chosen because of their abilities and Amethyst Brite is one of these. She must find out what element she controls and survive the Element Testing.

published on May 04, 2014completed

Professional Trouble-Makers

Professional Trouble-Makers
AMETHYST'S POV

At practice the next day, I found myself talking to the cute earth guy a lot. His name was Zane. He told me a bit about himself, and it wasn't that bad because he was last picked for Earth as I was for fire. I have to admit, the training room isn't the most romantic place in the world, but it was enjoyable. Moving on from that, I'm falling behind on training. Everyone can at least do something with fire, but all I have to prove I'm a fire controller is the mark in my hand, and the reddish specks starting to appear in my eyes. The Elementor had to give me a private session to learn how to make a flame. Once I got back to my dorm, my roommate, Ashe, who is also in fire with me, was sound asleep. It was the middle of the night. I looked at the mark on my hand. Suddenly a bright flame sparked out of it. I fell of my bed in surprise. The reaction left a throbbing pain in my hand. "Ouch!" I whispered.

ARIA'S POV

I woke up extra-early in the morning to go out and train. I thought it would be a great use of time to practice a bit before breakfast time. I got up from my bed and slowly stepped out and got changed. I didn't notice that I had awoken Dawn too. By the time I got to the practice room, the sun was beginning to rise. I almost walked into the training room, when I heard voices. It sounded like an argument. I peeked my head out the door. Two Elementors, Fire and Earth, where arguing over what element had a better uniform for duel days. I sighed. That was the most stupid argument I had ever heard in my life. "ARIA!" Exclaimed Dawn who had caught up. "Shush!" I said, but it was too late. The Earth Elementor cocked his head to the noise and started walking towards us. "Run!" Whispered Dawn. We both sprinted through the halls with the angry Elementor after us.

DAWN'S POV

We ran through the main meeting room. The Elementor almost got us, but I made a wall of water and Aria evaporated it into heavy fog. We laughed as the Elementor shouted after us. We run through the first story if dorms. By now, the Elementor was far behind. I giggled and made a small pool of water, which I then froze. We watched from a corner as the Elementor, so caught up in his anger, flipped backwards on the ice and fell with a THUNK! I covered my mouth to keep from laughing, but then someone grabbed Aria and I from behind and said: "What do you think you're doing?" It was the Earth Elementor.
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Is anyone else reminded of Divergent?
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I wrote this before I knew divergent existed
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on September 29, 2014
not anymmore. its marked as completed
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on September 28, 2014
You know you can actually edit what's alredy there, right?
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on September 28, 2014
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on September 28, 2014
thanks! i'm gonna make an edited version that's longer and has no pov switches and is less cheesy
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on September 28, 2014
Wow. So basically you came up with a storyline as good as one that millions of people have read, that's really amazing. Great job! All the switching POVs are kind of confusing
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on September 28, 2014
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on September 28, 2014
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on September 28, 2014
-CHOSEN-
remembering Chosen with 72 readers, but only 20 chapters. Released's first chapter is in!

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yay!who thumbed this down btw
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on August 31, 2014
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on August 31, 2014
Awesome story! Though you might want to add some paragraph breaks in the first chapter ;)
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:3 thanks and yea
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on August 17, 2014
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on August 01, 2014
Love this story!
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Reply to comments here. You can even reply to replies, but it will look weird. Qfeasters have to get used to it.
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Ok then...
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on July 12, 2014
sorry. recording this
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on July 12, 2014
What? I'm confused
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on July 12, 2014
see?
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on July 12, 2014
Like this
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on July 12, 2014
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on July 12, 2014
I Loved the Whole Thing, its so fascinating and like a proper book. I hope you become an author when you become older because I would surely read your books
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Aww!! Thanks
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on July 01, 2014
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on June 30, 2014
Awesome
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on June 24, 2014
I really like this! This is pretty much exactly what I want in a book!
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Thanks :D
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on June 16, 2014
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on June 16, 2014
Super cool! It was awese from the beginning!
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*awesome
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Thanks! :)
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on June 13, 2014
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on June 13, 2014
:D I hope you enjoyed it
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on June 08, 2014
Awesome!
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on June 04, 2014
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on May 31, 2014
I must say, that you had a amazing beginning makingdreaders(like me) want to read more, the chapters between were full of actions si readers didnt get bored. The chapters were quite long (which I like) and you also had a amazing finish
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My first ones are about my roleplay characters/my friends' characters, biographies, last known locations, that sort of thing. Then after I'm done with all that, I will be writing the roleplay out (Some character's names were forgotten, so I had to create new names for the forgotten ones, lol)
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on May 26, 2014
yay Magic is there!!! :D
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on May 26, 2014
amazing finish!
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on May 24, 2014
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on May 22, 2014
Honestly crystal, these are amazing!
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on May 22, 2014
Wow o_o Take me a couple of days to read then x
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on May 22, 2014
20 it think
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on May 21, 2014
How Many Chapters Is There Crystal? x
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on May 21, 2014
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on May 21, 2014
Amazin' x
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on May 21, 2014
:D anytime
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on May 20, 2014
^_^ Np
I'm just grateful that you added me in it etc
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on May 20, 2014
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on May 20, 2014
Nah its fine
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on May 20, 2014
Srry, just that sequels don't really get as much attention as the actual story
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on May 20, 2014
No sequel
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on May 20, 2014
WRITE A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WRITE.A.SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I NEED A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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SEQUEL TIME XD XD XD
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on May 19, 2014
Sometimes i did want to make a sequel, but meh
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on May 19, 2014
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