Chosen

Chosen

Every five years one child from each family 10-18 is chosen because of their abilities and Amethyst Brite is one of these. She must find out what element she controls and survive the Element Testing.

published on May 04, 2014completed

First Impressions

First Impressions
DAWN'S POV

After the Elementors where all settled down, Each section was led in through a door. I gaped when I stepped out the door. We where on a giant room that had a glass roof. I saw the wind people on the other side. "Wind and Water will practice here." Said the Wind Elementor. I ignored the rest and went to explore the room. There were small streams running through the entire room. The sun shone brightly in through the clear roof. I was so lost in my thoughts that I didn't see a guy who was ALSO lost in his thoughts. "OW!" I said as I bumped into him. "You where the guy that was really bad at all the elements!" I blurted out. He raised an eyebrow. "Thats... A bit harsh." I blocked out the comment. "How did you survive!?" I asked, eager to learn. "Um... Well, I think the Elementor didn't want my sister to.." He didn't finish his sentence. "Oh." I said. I decided it wasn't the best choice to talk about that, so I changed the subject. "My name's Dawn by the way!" I said. "Airion." He replied.

AMETHYST'S POV

I saw Airion go to a different room as me. Our Elementor took us to a dark room. It had lava cracks in the obsidian looking floor. There was no sign of sunlight, only the dim glow from the lava. The walls where mostly stone and dirt. The Earth Elementor explained everything that was going on. He said that he knew all the practice and first choosing had gone very quickly for us. "This is your training room." He said. He also said, every day we would duel one person until we had dueled all. Then the top 10 would move on. After that the top 5 would go to the "other place." I instantly got to work. I felt uncomfortable because the Fire Elementor kept standing there and watched me practice. Nothing happened even though I tried and tried. The Elementor let out a soft chuckle. "First you must concentrate." He said. "I AM!" I wanted to shout back, but I restrained. I sat down on the surprisingly cold floor. I closed my eyes and thought. For a second nothing happened. Then, I saw fire inside my mind and I opened my eyes quickly. I now had a throbbing headache. The palm of my hand was burning. When I finally had the courage to look at it, the Elementor's Brown-Red eyes brightened and I saw. On the palm if my hand, was a red mark. It was kind of flame shaped.

AIRION'S POV

Practice went pretty well. I couldn't get my mind off that Dawn girl, though. Then again, she was second picked, I was last. She was WAY out of my league. The good thing is, the Elementor said: "You have improved." That was pretty cool.
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Is anyone else reminded of Divergent?
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I wrote this before I knew divergent existed
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on September 29, 2014
not anymmore. its marked as completed
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on September 28, 2014
You know you can actually edit what's alredy there, right?
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on September 28, 2014
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on September 28, 2014
thanks! i'm gonna make an edited version that's longer and has no pov switches and is less cheesy
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on September 28, 2014
Wow. So basically you came up with a storyline as good as one that millions of people have read, that's really amazing. Great job! All the switching POVs are kind of confusing
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on September 28, 2014
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on September 28, 2014
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on September 28, 2014
-CHOSEN-
remembering Chosen with 72 readers, but only 20 chapters. Released's first chapter is in!

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yay!who thumbed this down btw
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on August 31, 2014
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on August 31, 2014
Awesome story! Though you might want to add some paragraph breaks in the first chapter ;)
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:3 thanks and yea
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on August 17, 2014
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on August 01, 2014
Love this story!
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Reply to comments here. You can even reply to replies, but it will look weird. Qfeasters have to get used to it.
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Ok then...
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on July 12, 2014
sorry. recording this
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on July 12, 2014
What? I'm confused
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on July 12, 2014
see?
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on July 12, 2014
Like this
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on July 12, 2014
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on July 12, 2014
I Loved the Whole Thing, its so fascinating and like a proper book. I hope you become an author when you become older because I would surely read your books
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Aww!! Thanks
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on July 01, 2014
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on June 30, 2014
Awesome
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on June 24, 2014
I really like this! This is pretty much exactly what I want in a book!
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Thanks :D
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on June 16, 2014
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on June 16, 2014
Super cool! It was awese from the beginning!
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*awesome
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Thanks! :)
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on June 13, 2014
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on June 13, 2014
:D I hope you enjoyed it
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on June 08, 2014
Awesome!
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on June 04, 2014
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on May 31, 2014
I must say, that you had a amazing beginning makingdreaders(like me) want to read more, the chapters between were full of actions si readers didnt get bored. The chapters were quite long (which I like) and you also had a amazing finish
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My first ones are about my roleplay characters/my friends' characters, biographies, last known locations, that sort of thing. Then after I'm done with all that, I will be writing the roleplay out (Some character's names were forgotten, so I had to create new names for the forgotten ones, lol)
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on May 26, 2014
yay Magic is there!!! :D
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on May 26, 2014
amazing finish!
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on May 24, 2014
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on May 22, 2014
Honestly crystal, these are amazing!
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on May 22, 2014
Wow o_o Take me a couple of days to read then x
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on May 22, 2014
20 it think
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on May 21, 2014
How Many Chapters Is There Crystal? x
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on May 21, 2014
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on May 21, 2014
Amazin' x
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on May 21, 2014
:D anytime
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on May 20, 2014
^_^ Np
I'm just grateful that you added me in it etc
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on May 20, 2014
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on May 20, 2014
Nah its fine
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on May 20, 2014
Srry, just that sequels don't really get as much attention as the actual story
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on May 20, 2014
No sequel
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on May 20, 2014
WRITE A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WRITE.A.SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I NEED A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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SEQUEL TIME XD XD XD
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on May 19, 2014
Sometimes i did want to make a sequel, but meh
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on May 19, 2014
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