Chosen

Chosen

Every five years one child from each family 10-18 is chosen because of their abilities and Amethyst Brite is one of these. She must find out what element she controls and survive the Element Testing.

published on May 04, 2014completed

Chosen Ones

AMETHYST'S POV

Everyone in the city gathered around the large room. Guards pushed them back as they took 1 child from each family and led them into the room. There where frantic cries as parents hugged their kids goodbye. I was standing in the back of the line holding my twin brothers hand tightly. One of the guards walked up to my family slowly. They observed the my brother an I. Finally, he pushed my brother to the front of the line and escorted him into the room. I cried out, but no one could hear over the screaming and crying. My parents held me back. "Airion..." I whispered my brothers name. Most of the people in my city where named after gems, or metals. My brother's name meant silver. I would never see him again. Then a different guard came and pushed me into the room several minutes after my brother. I didn't talk to the guard, as my parents commanded. I could not see inside the room. It was dark. I touched the air before me and softly called my brother's name. He called my name back. There was a moment of silence. Then one of the guards shut the door behind us and turned on a dim light. He opened another door and led all the chosen ones through. When the darkness resolved itself they where standing in a giant, medium lit room. I ran to her brother's side. The guards lined everyone up. None of my friends where there. The guard spoke up. "Each of you will be put through a test." He said. I held her breath. "You will be sorted into 4 element groups after. There is Earth, Wind, Water, and Fire." I let my breath out. Everyone would live. "But there will only be 5 per element. I gasped along with the hundred other teens and kids. I was only 15! How could I compete against 18 and 17 year olds? The guard explained the rules. First, there would be training. Then, there would be duels. At the end of the month, it would be announced who would be sorted to an element group. My hands became sweaty, but my brother looked perfectly calm. I stared blankly ahead. "Each of you will learn how to use each element properly, even though you already have it in you." I was shocked. He explained that one child in each family was born with an element, but my brother and I both got called... He said we would be put through a different test to tell which element we had. I didn't listen to the rest. I was to busy thinking about it.
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Is anyone else reminded of Divergent?
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I wrote this before I knew divergent existed
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on September 29, 2014
not anymmore. its marked as completed
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on September 28, 2014
You know you can actually edit what's alredy there, right?
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on September 28, 2014
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on September 28, 2014
thanks! i'm gonna make an edited version that's longer and has no pov switches and is less cheesy
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on September 28, 2014
Wow. So basically you came up with a storyline as good as one that millions of people have read, that's really amazing. Great job! All the switching POVs are kind of confusing
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on September 28, 2014
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on September 28, 2014
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on September 28, 2014
-CHOSEN-
remembering Chosen with 72 readers, but only 20 chapters. Released's first chapter is in!

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yay!who thumbed this down btw
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on August 31, 2014
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on August 31, 2014
Awesome story! Though you might want to add some paragraph breaks in the first chapter ;)
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:3 thanks and yea
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on August 17, 2014
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on August 01, 2014
Love this story!
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Reply to comments here. You can even reply to replies, but it will look weird. Qfeasters have to get used to it.
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Ok then...
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on July 12, 2014
sorry. recording this
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on July 12, 2014
What? I'm confused
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on July 12, 2014
see?
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on July 12, 2014
Like this
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on July 12, 2014
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on July 12, 2014
I Loved the Whole Thing, its so fascinating and like a proper book. I hope you become an author when you become older because I would surely read your books
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Aww!! Thanks
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on July 01, 2014
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on June 30, 2014
Awesome
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on June 24, 2014
I really like this! This is pretty much exactly what I want in a book!
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Thanks :D
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on June 16, 2014
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on June 16, 2014
Super cool! It was awese from the beginning!
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*awesome
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Thanks! :)
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on June 13, 2014
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on June 13, 2014
:D I hope you enjoyed it
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on June 08, 2014
Awesome!
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on June 04, 2014
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on May 31, 2014
I must say, that you had a amazing beginning makingdreaders(like me) want to read more, the chapters between were full of actions si readers didnt get bored. The chapters were quite long (which I like) and you also had a amazing finish
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My first ones are about my roleplay characters/my friends' characters, biographies, last known locations, that sort of thing. Then after I'm done with all that, I will be writing the roleplay out (Some character's names were forgotten, so I had to create new names for the forgotten ones, lol)
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on May 26, 2014
yay Magic is there!!! :D
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on May 26, 2014
amazing finish!
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on May 24, 2014
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on May 22, 2014
Honestly crystal, these are amazing!
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on May 22, 2014
Wow o_o Take me a couple of days to read then x
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on May 22, 2014
20 it think
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on May 21, 2014
How Many Chapters Is There Crystal? x
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on May 21, 2014
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on May 21, 2014
Amazin' x
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on May 21, 2014
:D anytime
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on May 20, 2014
^_^ Np
I'm just grateful that you added me in it etc
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on May 20, 2014
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on May 20, 2014
Nah its fine
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on May 20, 2014
Srry, just that sequels don't really get as much attention as the actual story
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on May 20, 2014
No sequel
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on May 20, 2014
WRITE A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WRITE.A.SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I NEED A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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SEQUEL TIME XD XD XD
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on May 19, 2014
Sometimes i did want to make a sequel, but meh
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on May 19, 2014
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