Pony pals

Pony pals

Hi all, this is my 1st story, plz comment what you thought. I don't care how bad you criticise me it will all help with my next book... Enjoy. P.s. this is my fan made story, it is not MLP. P.p.s. the pictures aren't any of my horses. I also use some pictures from MLP:FIM and these pictures are hasbros.

published on July 30, 2013completed

Wedding plans

Wedding plans
As George and Daisy talk and walk through the hall Flash crashes into George "I'm so sorry sir" Flash apologizes, George shakes the dust off himself "quit alright". Daisy clears her throat but then George speaks "oh hey Flash, thanks for helping Daisy with our father" "our" Flash echoes. George speaks "Yeah, I'm George" Flash replies "oh yes, Daisy has told me so much about you, Lilly couldn't have a better royal guard Sargent than you and Daisy is lucky to have a big brother like you" George smiles "we'll Daisy couldn't have a better stallion then you" flash dips his head, flash kissed Daisy on the cheek then hurried on his way. "We'll little sis, he's a keeper" Daisy blushes.

"Pat" Flash said, hearing the urgent tone in his voice replied "what's up" Flash panics "what party should I do for the Prince?" Pat laughs "we'll that easy, the party should be at the pony club, call DJ-colt and book the place"
Flash sighs "thanks Pat, how is Lilly's party plan coming?" Pat bounced around "it's coming along better then expected, the party is going to be at Pony peek park" Flash smiles thinking pat is the best party pony he knows and farewells her and is on his way. He is in the royal lounge when Princess Lilly comes in "there you are Flash" she sighs "I've been looking for you" Flash bows "what is it Lilly?" Lilly replies "Your father is here" then Rainbowflash enters the room "son! There you are" Flash moves over and his father sits down "it feels like just yesterday that you and Princess Lilly were in ponycare moving to the school" Princess Lilly and Flash smile, Rainbowflash continues "I came here to congratulate you on finding a mare” Flash beams at his fathers praises. “how long have you known her for?” rainbowflash asks. Flash replies “only a month, when I came here on the train i meet her on the train. I felt a twinkle in my eye when I saw her.” Rainbowflash smiles “ah, i remember that with your mother. I meet her when she was new to Cloud land, she asked if there was a place to stay, I said there was a spare room in my house. She accepted then boom we fell in love" flash smiles, his father continues "then a season later. Pop, you were born" Flash smiles then says "father, where is Snowstar?" rainbow replies "she's at Thomas's house for the week" rainbow smiles "I best head to the kitchen to see of Dash needs help, se ya round son" and trots off.
There's a honk outside and the stallions And mares go into the limos and go to there parties.
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Wow, ottimo lavoro
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on December 18, 2013
Thank you
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on September 05, 2013
This was wonderful! I love it!
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on September 05, 2013
Sassymaker100 thank you. Check out Pony Pals: 2
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on August 19, 2013
Very good work bravo:)
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on August 19, 2013
GREAT WORK I <3 IT
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on August 11, 2013
Thank you SparrowClawFan
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on August 08, 2013
Wow this is amazing! I love it!!
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on August 08, 2013
Thank you Primcess_Twilight. I hope you enjoy the next book.
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on August 08, 2013
wow awesome its cool cause its long
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on August 08, 2013
Ah, finally finished! Uploading now...
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on August 04, 2013
I may not finish the book today. I was up late last night watching Jurassic park. I managed to write 1 chapter... Enjoy
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on August 03, 2013
Yay! Can't wait!
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on August 02, 2013
3 to 5 chapters remaining in pony pals. I will add them within 20 hours. I will then add a page called Firestar Stories, feel free to chat to me on there...
Again plz feel free to comment what you think, this is my 1st story so I'd like as much info to help with my next book. ;)
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on August 02, 2013
*ether
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on August 01, 2013
I will be writing the rest. I'm up to where I am. I will post the new chapter/chapters rather Saturday, Sunday, Monday (NZ date)
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on August 01, 2013
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on July 31, 2013
I'm about to add the 5th chapter... Plz comment on what I could do to make tho better and plz rate.
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on July 31, 2013
Thank you DragonFireGirl101:)
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on July 30, 2013
it is a very good story! Ill try to do a review on this ASAP! :D
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on July 30, 2013
This is my own twist to MLP. It's called Pony pals till I find a better name. :)
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on July 30, 2013
You should make more!
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on July 30, 2013
It's Manehatten, not Maneton... BUT IT'S VERY GOOD! I LOVE IT!
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on July 30, 2013