Pony pals

Pony pals

Hi all, this is my 1st story, plz comment what you thought. I don't care how bad you criticise me it will all help with my next book... Enjoy. P.s. this is my fan made story, it is not MLP. P.p.s. the pictures aren't any of my horses. I also use some pictures from MLP:FIM and these pictures are hasbros.

published on July 30, 2013completed

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L-O-V-E There was a knock on the door, Bill answered it and is nearly knocked over, "he's in the bedroom on the right uncle" Rainbowflash dashes to the room. "Dad" Flash says surprised "son, I'm so glad your ok" rainbow says then Hug's his son "ow!" Flash howls in pain "sorry" rainbow says, soon Raincloud, princess Lilly, and daisy come into the room "daisy!" Flash merrily says "how are you feeling?" Asks daisy, flash replies "I'm good, ribs still hurt." They talk, Then the princess speaks "Harold has confessed and is going to behaviour classes" the princess looks at Rainbow and Raincloud "you two can stay in my castle while he gets better" Both Pegasus look at the princess "we couldn't possibly disturb you" Raincloud says. The princess replies "think of it as a way I can help you as Flash recovers" both Pegasus nod. "May I speak with the pegasy family alone" the princess asks, violet and daisy nod and leave "I've already asked Flash but, would you like to come and help with my wedding?" All the ponies gasp and nod. "Daisy seems like a nice mare" princess Lilly says turning to flash, flash says "she is" the princess responds "she's vary beautiful... Is she your special some pony" all eyes look at Flash "we'll" flash says going red "she is a lovely mare, but I Donno if she feels the same way"

In the lounge violet looks at daisy "Flash seems like a kind stallion" daisy replies with a sigh "yeah" "is he your special some pony?" Asks violet, daisy goes red and replies "he's tall, handsome, and vary, vary sweet... But I Donno if he feels the same way" her mother looks at her "you ask when you ready but a pony like him comes around once in a lifetime" Daisy nods "I know mother"

"If you lover why don't you go ask, if you don't how will you know?" Dash says to Flash, flash replies "your right" and hops out of bed "are ya sure your alright flash?" Big Bill says, flash replies "I'll be fine" and limps to the lounge "may I speak to you daisy" daisy respond "sure" and they both go to the tall tree in the backyard "daisy" Flash says looking into her eyes "yes?" Daisy replies. Flash holds his head up "I really l-like you" daisy replies sweetly "so do I" Flash continues "I like you more then a friend and more then a PFF" daisy sighs "same" Flame leans in and they kiss. The others watch from the kitchen window. "I'm glad Flash found his special some pony" the princess says with a little giggle
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Wow, ottimo lavoro
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on December 18, 2013
Thank you
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on September 05, 2013
This was wonderful! I love it!
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on September 05, 2013
Sassymaker100 thank you. Check out Pony Pals: 2
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on August 19, 2013
Very good work bravo:)
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on August 19, 2013
GREAT WORK I <3 IT
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on August 11, 2013
Thank you SparrowClawFan
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on August 08, 2013
Wow this is amazing! I love it!!
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on August 08, 2013
Thank you Primcess_Twilight. I hope you enjoy the next book.
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on August 08, 2013
wow awesome its cool cause its long
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on August 08, 2013
Ah, finally finished! Uploading now...
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on August 04, 2013
I may not finish the book today. I was up late last night watching Jurassic park. I managed to write 1 chapter... Enjoy
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on August 03, 2013
Yay! Can't wait!
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on August 02, 2013
3 to 5 chapters remaining in pony pals. I will add them within 20 hours. I will then add a page called Firestar Stories, feel free to chat to me on there...
Again plz feel free to comment what you think, this is my 1st story so I'd like as much info to help with my next book. ;)
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on August 02, 2013
*ether
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on August 01, 2013
I will be writing the rest. I'm up to where I am. I will post the new chapter/chapters rather Saturday, Sunday, Monday (NZ date)
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on August 01, 2013
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on July 31, 2013
I'm about to add the 5th chapter... Plz comment on what I could do to make tho better and plz rate.
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on July 31, 2013
Thank you DragonFireGirl101:)
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on July 30, 2013
it is a very good story! Ill try to do a review on this ASAP! :D
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on July 30, 2013
This is my own twist to MLP. It's called Pony pals till I find a better name. :)
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on July 30, 2013
You should make more!
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on July 30, 2013
It's Manehatten, not Maneton... BUT IT'S VERY GOOD! I LOVE IT!
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on July 30, 2013