Pony pals

Pony pals

Hi all, this is my 1st story, plz comment what you thought. I don't care how bad you criticise me it will all help with my next book... Enjoy. P.s. this is my fan made story, it is not MLP. P.p.s. the pictures aren't any of my horses. I also use some pictures from MLP:FIM and these pictures are hasbros.

published on July 30, 2013completed

Daisy's secret

Daisy's secret
In the morning Flash Wakes up and sees his little sister standing at the door. Snow star smiles. "Good morning. I hope I am  not disturbing you." Flash smiles. "not at all. Come here and give me a hug" As Snowstar hugs Flash Daisy wakes up. Snow star looks at her and asks Flash. "Is this your SSP." Daisy smiles "yes I am. My name is Daisy. What is yours?" Snow star replies. "I'm Snow star, Flashes LSBFF." Snow star continues. "The Prince and Princess want to speak with you both." Daisy and Flash give each other puzzled looks. Snow star soon races out the door. Flash and Daisy walk down to the royal lounge, as they enter George closes the door behind them. The prince speaks. "Ah, I hope Snow star didn't wake you." Both ponies shake there heads. The prince continues. "We came for a little privy talk, Daisy came to us and told us ..." The princess stopped him and smiles. "Told us that you both with to stay here a little longer." Flash gives Daisy a curious look. The princess took Daisy into the next room.

"Should I tell him or will you dear." The princess asks. Daisy replies, "can you... I'm gonna have trouble telling mom." The princess nods.

The prince speaks. "I hope you liked our wedding an the song we picked for you two." Flash smiles. "Best wedding ever. And yes, thanks for the song... How did you know her favourite song." The prince replied, "when you were out planning the Bachelor party me and her talked for a bit." Both mares return. The princess gently begins to speak. "I have some news." Flashes ears go back, "I hope it's good news." The princess looks at Daisy and she nods. "Daisy is pregnant... Your gonna be a father." Flash stares from Daisy to Princess Lilly, to prince Edward and back at Daisy. 'Your. Gonna. Be. A. Father.' Echoes in Flashes head. Flash clears his throat. "Well." His voice cracks. He sits there taking in the info. After 5 minutes or so Flash smiles. "I'm gonna be a father, how far pregnant are you." Daisy sighs. "1 month." Flash asks. "Are you gonna tell your mother." Daisy has a scared look. "I." Flash interrupts, "it's ok, I'll come with you and tell her." Daisy smiles. "Thank you." And they head to violets room. Violet chirps. "Come In." Flash and Daisy enter, daisy has a worried look. Flash was about to speak when Violet speaks. "What have you done to my daughter." Flash replies. "How do I put this... Um. Me and Daisy have news for you." Violets look tells him she is concerned but to go on. "Daisy is..." Flash gulps. "She is pregnant." After saying these words Violets eyes gleam. "Oh I am so happy for you." Daisy sighs. "I'm glad your not upset mom." Violet looks confused. "Why would I be upset?   Sweety." Violet then jokes. "It's about time you gave me a grand filly or grand colt." Violet then hugs them both. "Ha ha. Guess what this means." Daisy smiles, Flash looks confused. Violet continues. "It means another wedding soon." Flash then smiles. "I guess your right mother always.." He stops. "Oh no, I have to tell mother and father." Violet smiles. "No problem, I'll tell Raincloud on our day at the spa. You just find a way to tell Rainbowflash." Flash nods. "Oh can you two make sure Dash doesn't find out yet. She is against baby's before marriage." The two mares nod and all 3 go on there merry way.

Daisy and Flash soon find Rainbow in the spa pool. "Father, in have some news." Daisy finds a natural spring and relaxes on it. Rainbow looks at Flash. "Hey my boy, what's on your mind." Flash looks at Daisy. Rainbow speaks. "She is a vary pretty thing." Flash looks at his father. "Dad iv got some news about me and Daisy." Rainbow looks in his sons eyes. "Is everything alright between you two. You didn't brake up did you. Flash sighs. "Quite the opposite father. I'm gonna be a dad." Rainbow is quiet then replies, "how far in is she." Flash replies, "1 month"

As Raincloud and Violet slip into a mud bath Raincloud speaks. "I know that look. Who is it? Bill and dash? Princess Lilly and prince Edward." She pauses then continues, "it isn't our two is it." Violet nods. "She's 1 month in." Raincloud looks at Violet, "do you have twins in the family." Violet thinks for a bit. "Nope, just 2 triplets." Raincloud smiles, "we got single ponies only." Both ponies say, "I wonder how many there will be" then both laugh.
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Wow, ottimo lavoro
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on December 18, 2013
Thank you
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on September 05, 2013
This was wonderful! I love it!
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on September 05, 2013
Sassymaker100 thank you. Check out Pony Pals: 2
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on August 19, 2013
Very good work bravo:)
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on August 19, 2013
GREAT WORK I <3 IT
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on August 11, 2013
Thank you SparrowClawFan
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on August 08, 2013
Wow this is amazing! I love it!!
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on August 08, 2013
Thank you Primcess_Twilight. I hope you enjoy the next book.
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on August 08, 2013
wow awesome its cool cause its long
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on August 08, 2013
Ah, finally finished! Uploading now...
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on August 04, 2013
I may not finish the book today. I was up late last night watching Jurassic park. I managed to write 1 chapter... Enjoy
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on August 03, 2013
Yay! Can't wait!
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on August 02, 2013
3 to 5 chapters remaining in pony pals. I will add them within 20 hours. I will then add a page called Firestar Stories, feel free to chat to me on there...
Again plz feel free to comment what you think, this is my 1st story so I'd like as much info to help with my next book. ;)
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on August 02, 2013
*ether
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on August 01, 2013
I will be writing the rest. I'm up to where I am. I will post the new chapter/chapters rather Saturday, Sunday, Monday (NZ date)
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on August 01, 2013
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on July 31, 2013
I'm about to add the 5th chapter... Plz comment on what I could do to make tho better and plz rate.
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on July 31, 2013
Thank you DragonFireGirl101:)
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on July 30, 2013
it is a very good story! Ill try to do a review on this ASAP! :D
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on July 30, 2013
This is my own twist to MLP. It's called Pony pals till I find a better name. :)
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on July 30, 2013
You should make more!
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on July 30, 2013
It's Manehatten, not Maneton... BUT IT'S VERY GOOD! I LOVE IT!
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on July 30, 2013