From Geek to Goddess

Erm..... maybe you should read Modpark? It's the most descriptive story out there so....

why are all the pics of Ariana Grande?

Well, um, I don't like being mean, so I'm just going to give advice: Make it linger, and make this just an introduction to yourself and the Prologue. Add a conflict through another character, add dialogue, a plot, a twist (maybe something like YOU"RE the bad character or something) then wrap it up with either a death or a happy ending, depends on how you like See More to roll. Make the next chapters longer and include descriptive language like similes (comparing something to something else), metaphors (stating directly that something IS something else), and personification (describing inanimate objects as if they were living things). Hope this helps you with this story or any further stories you might write. ;)
-ArtemisMoon91904

No problem in this story.

Short, stupid, and bor-ing! Possibly the worst story I've ever read with a really bad moral.

this story dosen't make any sense

HATE THIS STORY BETTER IMPROVE

Dumb I'm always looking at ratings and comments just in case

What kind story is this, next time choose a better picture and one more thing this story is stupid

really short story, quite boring!!!

jean gossimer is a girl from ant farm that Cameron imagine. but really the pic is Ariana grande. Ariana started out with brown hair not black.