Hey!i'm Jean,Jean Gossimer I come from I small town.I moved to New York and started going to school in Hollywood Arts.Hollywood Arts is a special school for teens with special talents.This is about me going from geek to Goddess
Next week my mom took me to dye my hair.I chose very red hair.I also got contact lenses and went shopping at Louis Vutton,Victoria Secret,Piperlime and Neiman Marcus.I got the money of a contest I won in my school,Hollywood Arts they were hosting a talent show.I won 50,000 dollars cash prize.I also bought an IPhone 6 for me.I was walking in school when one of the hottest boys asked me on a date,Kevin Mase.We were going for sushi at Nozu
Well, um, I don't like being mean, so I'm just going to give advice: Make it linger, and make this just an introduction to yourself and the Prologue. Add a conflict through another character, add dialogue, a plot, a twist (maybe something like YOU"RE the bad character or something) then wrap it up with either a death or a happy ending, depends on how you like See More to roll. Make the next chapters longer and include descriptive language like similes (comparing something to something else), metaphors (stating directly that something IS something else), and personification (describing inanimate objects as if they were living things). Hope this helps you with this story or any further stories you might write. ;) -ArtemisMoon91904
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