A Knight's Cry

A Knight's Cry

Liam, a knight finds himself avenging his family with someone he never knew before. Liam must fight through the pains and fear of the mission. [Thanks for Reading! Please give Feedback!]

published on September 25, 2015not completed

A Journey

        Rose and Liam traveled east, where Henry told them to go. So far it had been a dense forest, seemingly endless. Then they hear a noise.
        "Hey, did you hear that?" said Liam, in curiosity.
        "Yeah," said Rose.
        "What is it?" asked Liam.
        "I think its the Elves! There coming to help us!" said Rose, with joy.
        "How could they possibly-" Liam paused.
        All of the Elves came forward them, and the bowed down to show respect to the travelers.
        "Sir and Madame, what brings you to the Elven part of the forest?" asked the Chief Elf, Walter.
        "We are merely traveling to another land, and just stumbled upon your forest." said Liam.
        "Indeed," agreed Rose.
        The Chief Elf stabbed his staff onto the ground and started a song of good luck.
        "Way-oh! Way-oh-oh-waoh!" sang the Elves.
        "What are they doing?" whispered Liam.
        "They're sing us a song of good luck!" said Rose.
        Rose and Liam left shortly after the Elven song of good luck. The headed east, and then found what they were looking for, kingdom walls.         
        "I think we found it," said Liam.
        "Ya think?" Said Rose.
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I LOVE that you actually have good grammar. That's surprisingly hard to find on here. However, I feel like there could be some improvements in your writing as far as emotion, thoughts, feelings, descriptions, and flow are concerned. You need to be as into your writing at the time you type as you want the reader to be when they read. Also, are you really going See More
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Thanks for the help!
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You're welcome! I can go more in-depth (up to several pages), but I feel like that would probably just be annoying. :3
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wow! Its awesome!
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