Message to the readers.
Hey guys! I just want to thank you so much for helping this story get big and giving me tips on how to write better I know how my first chapter was pretty bad but back then I was a pretty big amateur at story's details and what not so I was mainly just like"if I throw it out there regardless what it is they will love it!" I don't know why I was that stupid but you guys lured me out of that like how I was snakeing my quotes from the characters and how it lacked timeline in a way where I just sped things up a lot and cut it short and how I should check over my chapters at least twice before publishing and that important stuff and you kept telling me "don't worry with a little improvement this story can get pretty popular!" And just wanted me to look on the bright side of it and just make more out of that and I LOVED how you sugarcoated nothing because the more I'm spoiled on something the more often I lack getting the goal accomplished correctly usually but I swear I'm trying my best to fit forestclan into my right schedule because every week I'm watching little kids for parents,going to classes,doing chores,trying to fix my sleep schedule. It's just hard. And it gets harder every year because there's more to do and there's more priorities I need to take car eod that has to do with my physical health and emotional health and a lot of the time when I'm busy I'm multitasking everything because I also recently lost my phone and we think I left it on vibrate since I do that a lot so we are still searching for it and since I don't have my phone my parents won't let me stay home alone to work on stuff and it's just..blah anyways happy New year's and I'm so sorry I couldn't get a new chapter done tonight but like I said I'm SUPER busy with stuff and yeah I hope you have a AMAZING 2015 and I will hopefully have a new chapter later btw I'm also going to be taking in some people to help me with forestclan it was originally forestclan a whole new beginning as some of you may know because it was supposed to be a sequel to prophecy of Silverflight on my other account but the plot of the story kind of changed over the weeks leading to a story that more closer to the ways of the original warrior cats books and what not so yeah I WILL be hiring some people to help me out on the story and there will be a personal profile page where I will be accepted people to help out with the story and add characters and chapter plots with me so if you want to help with the story feel free to go to my page section on my profile and pm me or get in contact with me anyway possible and you can ask me and I will most likely accept. So yeah. HAVE A HAPPY NEW YEAR! :D and I will be having a poll determining if I should stick to the original plot or head the path we are beginning to be on.
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Also: I think you have something called a 'snake in your sentences'. Most of your sentences are very long, without a lot of puncuation! Try to break them down into smaller parts for a more dramatic effect See More on your reader.
I touched on this in the others: The main problem is your punctuation. I don't really understand what is going on? You lost me at 'BloodClan', sorry!
Otherwise, good job :)
???/5 stars!
Holy s*it you missed a comma! Call the ambulance I'm gonna have a nervous breakdown! And you missed a capital letter I have to dial 9-9-9. Help meeeee!