Forestclan

Forestclan

Young Aquashine only memory of her birth clan is leaving and she seeks her history and what lies ahead in the future and find out about a prophesied cat before her named Silverflight for she is the only adult cat left from the previous generation with the villains known as darkclaw and lightclaw.

published on December 26, 2014not completed

who gets them?

who gets them? "Tear...are you sure you want to fight them?" Stream asked "Yes stream, Ruststar always has looked down on bloodclan, and I'm tired of it! Just sick of it!" He spat "if you say so,but I don't think it's safe to have our warriors walking side by side with the forestclan warriors. They could start fighting and-" before she could finish tear aggressively argued "STOP TELLING ME HOW TO DO MY JOB! Are you the leader? last time I checked NO! Your the deputy!" He complained "so unless something happens to me! Which I doubt would happen...your the leader! And I won't be gone for a starclan of a long time!"
He lashed at her
"y-yes sir..." she felt mousebrained "if we weren't needing you for this battle I would have hurt you by now!" He overreacted "Hey! Leave her alone tear! She's just concerned about your safety!" Sky complained to his own leader to defend his crush tear looked behind at him giving Sky a long angry glare "are you threatening your Leader?" He went back to confront Sky "no...I'm just saying you shouldn't threaten her like that!" He courageously stood up to tear "Forget you! I don't need a warrior like you to tell me how to treat a deputy!" He threatened "My heart has hardened and my brain took a step up! And when the heart gets warm it's easier to die! And when that happens to warriors like you they need to die!" He slashed sky's face  as sky swiftly fought back it caught Ruststars eye as both forestclan and bloodclan watched equally in astonishment "TEAR! STOP IT!" He raced to sky's aid "SKY LEAVE HIM ALONE! PLEASE!" Stream sided with Tear surprisingly.
Join Qfeast to read the entire story!
Sign In. It is absolutely free!
4.5
Please Rate:
0.0 out of 5 from 6 users

Comments (38)

I love this story. Keep making more warrior cat stories.!
reply
About Author
Report
on June 06, 2016
About Author
Report
on June 29, 2015
Cool :) I like it.
reply
Thanks!
reply
NP, man :3
reply
About Author
Report
on December 28, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 28, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 28, 2014
This new chap is a pretty big plot twist! Awesome!
reply
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
Thanks!! :D in the meantime you can also be reading that swanfeather fanfic too! Trust me it's pretty awesome :)
reply
I shall.... and I will..... AWAY!!! x3
reply
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
Thanks! :D
reply
It's well deserved!
reply
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
Hey guys! The 3rd/newest chapter is from a different POV of the battle going on at the falls currently! Hope you enjoy this shocker/cliffhanger!
reply
YAS!!!!
reply
I know so far the chapters are short but I'm getting a really busy schedule lately so yeah hopefully by spring when I have more free time it Will have longer chapters ^_^" hopefully it will be worth the wait!
reply
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
Love the new chap!
reply
Thanks! I'm just about to write a new chapter!
reply
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
The second chapter is really good, you have definitely improved your style!
reply
Thanks! I've been trying mainly to pay attention to how long my sentences got I mainly do like..25 words per sentence usually.if I want what the character says to be longer I just spot it of with said,demanded,spat and then continue that sentence in a new thing :)
reply
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 27, 2014
Omg, the second chapter is amazing, I love it.
reply
Well when your typing instead of talking to me I can't sense the tone of the sentence
reply
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
Ok geez! Chill out...
reply
You're telling me to chill out? I am chill.
reply
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
I was in the middle of doing some artwork go this for the second chapter so I saved it for a minute so I could get it done...if this is sarcasm then I don't respect it.
reply
It was a joke, OMG. -.-"
reply
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
I love it!!!!
reply
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
LOVE IT!!!
reply
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
nice!
reply
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
Awesome! I love it!
reply
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
Nice start :)
reply
A few tips: It all seems a little fast-paced, and I have a feeling you could have spread this over two different chapters. Try and take things a bit slower.

Also: I think you have something called a 'snake in your sentences'. Most of your sentences are very long, without a lot of puncuation! Try to break them down into smaller parts for a more dramatic effect See More
reply
I'm English :P
reply
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
:T "9-9-9"? I thought it was "9-1-1-". Well, it is in America.
reply
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
Favourited. :)
reply
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
XD it's ok I've had some pretty harsh stuff said to me in the past so I'm kinda used to it! Besides I don't really like it when people just sugarcoat things so yeah :) I always aim for the honest opinion :p
reply
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
Sorry if I seemed a bit harsh :( When I'm asked to give 'constructive criticism' for others stories in class I'm just like:

Holy s*it you missed a comma! Call the ambulance I'm gonna have a nervous breakdown! And you missed a capital letter I have to dial 9-9-9. Help meeeee!
reply
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
Ok! Thanks! I kinda messed up every now and then with stripe I have no idea why but as I was ending the chapter I for some reason kept calling her stream and didn't see it until it was published but I'm thinking to cover that mistake the pov of stream is he raced to forestclan immediately following the scent of stripe and Stream being the deputy she is she races See More
reply
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014
About Author
Report
on December 26, 2014