Forestclan

Forestclan

Young Aquashine only memory of her birth clan is leaving and she seeks her history and what lies ahead in the future and find out about a prophesied cat before her named Silverflight for she is the only adult cat left from the previous generation with the villains known as darkclaw and lightclaw.

published on December 26, 2014not completed

Half-clanned...

Half-clanned... Lightningfoot glared at me and my siblings "....how are they doing sunflower?" Lightningfoot asked in wonder "they are fine but..." sunflower said hesitantly "but what?" He was anxious to know "I took a sample on both dark and stripes appearance and all their traits and their family tree from Ruststars information and well.." the cat  was shocked to know "the one they call diamond is not the offspring of dark..in fact she's not full bloodclan at all!" She said quickly as lightningfoot gasped in major shock "Shes half-clan born...her father is of this clan and her mother as you know is bloodclan." She spoke in shame
"Who's the father!?!?" Lightningfoot was determined to know "it's...Tealfur" she said "b-b-b-b-b-b-b-b-b-but he went missing long ago! It's been 5 moons since he's been missing!" He said worried "but it's only true..it must be..because they look identical. Plus it's the only explanation so far..I could be wrong but this is all we can say for now" she explained  "Ok..how long ago were these kits born again?" He asked "2 days ago." She explained again "that means he's probably still alive!" He said relieved and happy his brothers probably alive "remember Lightningfoot. Your brother only might be alive. Queens are pregnant for at least 12 weeks. He could have died easily within that time." She admitted sadly "oh...right..." his ears dropped "at least you have what's last of him Lightningfoot..." she reassured him "yeah...ok" he smiled as he looked at the small kits
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I love this story. Keep making more warrior cat stories.!
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on June 29, 2015
Cool :) I like it.
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Thanks!
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NP, man :3
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on December 28, 2014
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on December 28, 2014
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on December 28, 2014
This new chap is a pretty big plot twist! Awesome!
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on December 27, 2014
Thanks!! :D in the meantime you can also be reading that swanfeather fanfic too! Trust me it's pretty awesome :)
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I shall.... and I will..... AWAY!!! x3
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on December 27, 2014
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on December 27, 2014
Thanks! :D
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It's well deserved!
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on December 27, 2014
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on December 27, 2014
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on December 27, 2014
Hey guys! The 3rd/newest chapter is from a different POV of the battle going on at the falls currently! Hope you enjoy this shocker/cliffhanger!
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YAS!!!!
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I know so far the chapters are short but I'm getting a really busy schedule lately so yeah hopefully by spring when I have more free time it Will have longer chapters ^_^" hopefully it will be worth the wait!
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on December 27, 2014
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on December 27, 2014
Love the new chap!
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Thanks! I'm just about to write a new chapter!
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on December 27, 2014
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on December 27, 2014
The second chapter is really good, you have definitely improved your style!
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Thanks! I've been trying mainly to pay attention to how long my sentences got I mainly do like..25 words per sentence usually.if I want what the character says to be longer I just spot it of with said,demanded,spat and then continue that sentence in a new thing :)
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on December 27, 2014
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on December 27, 2014
Omg, the second chapter is amazing, I love it.
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Well when your typing instead of talking to me I can't sense the tone of the sentence
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on December 26, 2014
Ok geez! Chill out...
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You're telling me to chill out? I am chill.
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on December 26, 2014
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on December 26, 2014
I was in the middle of doing some artwork go this for the second chapter so I saved it for a minute so I could get it done...if this is sarcasm then I don't respect it.
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It was a joke, OMG. -.-"
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on December 26, 2014
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on December 26, 2014
I love it!!!!
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on December 26, 2014
LOVE IT!!!
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on December 26, 2014
nice!
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on December 26, 2014
Awesome! I love it!
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on December 26, 2014
Nice start :)
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A few tips: It all seems a little fast-paced, and I have a feeling you could have spread this over two different chapters. Try and take things a bit slower.

Also: I think you have something called a 'snake in your sentences'. Most of your sentences are very long, without a lot of puncuation! Try to break them down into smaller parts for a more dramatic effect See More
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I'm English :P
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on December 26, 2014
:T "9-9-9"? I thought it was "9-1-1-". Well, it is in America.
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on December 26, 2014
Favourited. :)
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on December 26, 2014
XD it's ok I've had some pretty harsh stuff said to me in the past so I'm kinda used to it! Besides I don't really like it when people just sugarcoat things so yeah :) I always aim for the honest opinion :p
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on December 26, 2014
Sorry if I seemed a bit harsh :( When I'm asked to give 'constructive criticism' for others stories in class I'm just like:

Holy s*it you missed a comma! Call the ambulance I'm gonna have a nervous breakdown! And you missed a capital letter I have to dial 9-9-9. Help meeeee!
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on December 26, 2014
Ok! Thanks! I kinda messed up every now and then with stripe I have no idea why but as I was ending the chapter I for some reason kept calling her stream and didn't see it until it was published but I'm thinking to cover that mistake the pov of stream is he raced to forestclan immediately following the scent of stripe and Stream being the deputy she is she races See More
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on December 26, 2014
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