Another Parasite.
Amer looked to Malaria. He cocked a brow. "A. Cat? You mean those things that have ears like me?" Mal snorted ans flicked her ear. "Sorry.. Nice to meet you Malaria. Names Amer, Amer Pari." The bull horned cat softened her gaze. "Well, Amer Pari. I might just follow you around. Shall we get going?" Amer stayed silent, as if in surprise. There was an awkward silence. "I'll take that silence as a yes. Come on!" The small kitten spoke, running off. "He-Hey! Wait for me!"The pair ran out of the city. The night grew into a dawn, then a day. They found a cave. Later in the day as the sun was setting, Mal and Amer started a fire. Amer stared at it, fear in his eyes. "Hey! Earth to Amer! Do you repeat!?" Yelled the kitten suddenly. Amer jolted. "Hey don't do tha-"
"Um.. W-Whos there?" Said a voice.
"Who, are you?" Snarled Mal
"I mean no harm.. I.. I can come out-"
"Then do so."
The figure emerged from behind a rock. She had a bow and appeared with white hair, purple eyes, and a snake tail. Wait. Snake tail! Amer looked at her with joy. "Another Parasite! Yes! I know another!" The 8 year old boy ran up to her and hugged her. The white haired lass stood wide eyed, blushing. "Uh.. Who are you?" She spoke, once he stopped hugging her. "OH! Sorry, My name is Amer, and that cat is Malaria. Who are you?"
The fellow Parasite spoke. "My name is Anadromea."
"Nice!"
Mal rolled her eyes. "You look not to be trusted. Amer, can we trust her? Who knows why she is here or what she did. Yes she is younger than you and a fellow Parasite, but we don't know her! What do you say?" Amer looked to Mal, then to Anadromea. His decision would rely on Anadromea staying or leaving.
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In paragraph one it says"The whole room was silent." I suggest that you be more See More descriptive and replace the sentence with "The whole room was filled with eerie silence that grow more terrifying by as each second passed in absolute silence."
Lastly, in paragraph 5 it says"His parents stood in fear. Then explained to him. The more they explained. The more angry he grew..."
I suggest that you replace it with" his parents stood in agonizing terror as they admitted the secret they had longed to keep from him; he is a parasite. The more they explained the angrier he felt. The rage pumping through his veins like toxic venom."
I hope you liked my suggestions, and that you continue to write!
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