The Unleashed

The Unleashed

This is a story that is about my created character, Jack Lee. Jack Lee will battle alot of evil things like demons, angels, vampires, etc. This is my #1 story so i hope you all like it.

published on March 27, 2013completed

Chapter 11: Lilith

"It's gone..." Vanessa said. "All of it... It is all gone..."
"These demons will pay," Jack vowed.
Jack looked at Vanessa. She was about to cry. Jack pulled her in for a hug.
"All those people in there," Vanessa said. "They were like my family."
Jack looked her in the eyes.
"Listen," Jack said. "This is all going to end."
"Not for us," a female voice said.
Jack turned to see a woman there. Her hair was blonde and her eyes were all white. She had jeans on and a black jacket.
"Who are you?" Jack asked.
"I am the daughter of Lucifer," she said. "You can call me Lilith."
Vanessa grabbed the holy knife and took a few steps towards Lilith.
"She is mine Jack," Vanessa said. "Stay back."
"You really think you can beat me? Lilith asked? "I am like nothing you have ever faced before."
"Just shut your trap and fight," Vanessa said.
Lilith reached into her mouth and pulled out a dark sword. Vanessa drew her sword. She charged at Lilith. Lilith blocked the attack with her sword. Lilith smiled as she shoved Vanessa back. Vanessa stayed on her feet as she slid back.
Lilith ran and sliced Vanessa on the left arm. She was so fast that Vanessa had little time to act. Lilith teleported behind Vanessa and sliced her on the right arm. Lilith teleported again and kicked Vanessa hard in the back. Vanessa flew forward and crashed to the ground hard.
Lilith was on top of her. She lifted Vanessa by the throat and drew a small knife.
"Now you die," Lilith said.
Vanessa kicked her foot out and cracked Lilith right below the chin. Lilith dropped Vanessa as she staggered back. Vanessa punched Lilith in the face and tried to stab her with the holy knife. Lilith caught her by the wrist. Vanessa drew her .45 and fired. She hit Lilith in the gut. Lilith was knocked back, and Vanessa stabbed her in the head with the knife. She pushed Lilith to the ground.
"You know..." Lilith said. "Right now... My father is being freed... You are too late Jack... Too..."
Lilith's body turned to dust and blew away. Jack and Vanessa looked at each other in shock and fear.
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I feel like there are too many characters for a short story. ._.
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on April 27, 2013
I like it the ending was very sweet where Farrah came back lol a gift from God =) I like that lol and the sequal thing if up to you lol I just go with the flow lol
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on April 10, 2013
It's good just remember to keep an eye out for your spelling lol
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on April 03, 2013
Very good start off because it foes right to the action. This story is the type to keep u on the edge of your seat and just haves u thirsty for more lol. But one thing u wanna do Ant is since this is just writing, you don't have to put *'s when you wrote out a cuss word. But other than that, I like it so far
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on April 02, 2013
Sounds good =)
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on March 27, 2013