Legacy

Legacy

This is my most progressed book. It was originally based on a roleplay, and it has taken off from there. I hope you enjoy~ Also, I would really appreciate it if you could leave your opinion in the comments. I am always open to encouragements/criticism. BYE!

published on January 19, 2021completed

Chapter 31- I Trust You

Chapter 31- I Trust You After a moment he pulled his hand away. I opened my eyes. He looked a bit troubled.
"What?"
"I.. Should go."
He started getting up but I grabbed his wrist.
"Why?"
He stopped, and sighed.
"Its none of your business."
"I beg to differ."
"Its a long story."
"You had no problem telling me other things before."
"I've only known you for like a week."
"Yet we need each other."
"Dammit Ash..."
"No, tell me what's going on. You said I might be able to help you. I want to help you."
He was quiet, looking away from me. I held my stare at him until he got uncomfortable. He looked back at me.
"I'm not supposed to be here."
I let go of his arm.
"Is your physco sister going to attack us or something?"
He hesitated.
"Don't talk about her like that."
I nodded, and crossed my arms. I would wait until he told me.
Eventually he did.
"If its not obvious, giving information to someone who is considered a enemy is a traitorous act. If I get caught, I'm dead."
"It can't be that bad.." I mumbled, but I knew that the punishment is probably severe.
"Its bad. May I go now?"
"How do I know your not about to go tell the demons where I live and how to hurt me?"
He paused, then pulled me in and kissed my cheek. I felt my face heat up.
"I trust you."
He then vanished.
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This is really good
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Thanks
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on September 20, 2021
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on August 31, 2021
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on August 31, 2021
GAWD DAMN SOULUS UR OLD
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CDDCSSE3
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on July 23, 2021
LMAOOO
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NAHHH UR NOT THE FIRST
SOMEONE CALLED HIM SOULZ ONCE @Weirdo_Willow
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on July 23, 2021
I SPELT SOLUS WRONG I'M SO DUMB
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on July 23, 2021
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on July 23, 2021
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on July 23, 2021
Wait a min... Why does Solus' mom look familiar(Ch. 7)
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on April 15, 2021
4.7 now
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Your welcome
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on March 28, 2021
XD XD yeah ik. it amazes me everytime lol.
and thanks
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on March 27, 2021
Uhhh...@BlueTheQuizWhiz97 you have 376 reads on this story
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on March 27, 2021
Yeah
I just think this book deserves 5
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on March 27, 2021
Lol hopefully people vote it up-
Tho tbh I'm just glad people like my book lol
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on March 27, 2021
I think we need 6 more until 5
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on March 27, 2021
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on March 27, 2021
@moonston
guess what!
I added new chapters
And finished the book
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i red it its great
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on March 22, 2021
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on March 22, 2021
im crying for 2 reasons
1. souuls died
2. the book end ed
qwq
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on March 22, 2021
@BlueTheQuizWhiz97 omg love the book im glad you added more chapters i was like wheres the chapters but they are all so good thanks
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lmao np. im adding more rn
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on March 22, 2021
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on March 22, 2021
I'm never gonna finish this book. It's somehow TOO long for me and how DO YOU KEEP COMING UP WITH CHAPTERS?!?!?! DON'T YOU GET WRITER'S BLOCK?!?!?!
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XDDD Bish I almost NEVER get writers block. I dream about the plot every night, then write it down in the morning. Its a good thing I have vivid dreams. Also, the books almost over, so you'll have plenty of time to catch up
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@moonston lol
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on March 22, 2021
lol well if it helps I knew my character very well before i started writing. hes form a rp @moonston @Masky_Weeb_Fan
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on March 22, 2021
same @Masky_Weeb_Fan i always almost have writers block after the first chapter
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on March 22, 2021
@BlueTheQuizWhiz97 It seems so easy for you but when it comes to me I have a writers block right after the first chapter-
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on March 22, 2021
lmao I just am really attached to the book. I love it like a part of me. I have so many ideas for it, I just put them together and put it on paper whenever I fele inspired @Masky_Weeb_Fan
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on March 22, 2021
Thank the LORDS!!! Tech me your way of NEVER getting writers block!
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on March 22, 2021
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on March 22, 2021
me before i read it: this should be a good story but idk if im going to be into it
me after i read it: HELL YEAH BEAT THEIR ASS SOLUS!!
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XD aw thanks guys lmao.
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on March 20, 2021
Same reaction after @Your.local.idiot
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on March 20, 2021
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on March 20, 2021
This deserves 5 why the f*ck is it 4.6
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on March 20, 2021
@moonston
I made more lol. Sorry it took so long things have been happening-
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on March 18, 2021
When are you going to make more @BlueTheQuizWhiz97
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on March 05, 2021
OMG LOOOOVE CHAPTER 29 WHEN ARE YOU GONNA WRITE MORE?
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Hopefully really soon. Thank you! ^w^ ^w^ >w< @moonston
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ok your welcome @BlueTheQuizWhiz97
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on February 19, 2021
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on February 19, 2021
sorry...school has been-hell...
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on February 18, 2021
are you gonna make mre it was amazig
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HELL YES. Thank you for asking, I have gotten literally no comments on this story for awhile and I wasn't sure if it was good or not lately @moonston
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nah its fine. I don't blame you. Just blaming literally every other person who read my book but said nothing--- Jk Jk I love you all if your reading this.
(Dang moonston its tough knowing lots of people-)
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on February 18, 2021
sorry alot of school work and wasnt really reading much
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on February 18, 2021
Chapter 21 is FINALLY out
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@moonston See More
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on February 04, 2021
@BlueTheQuizWhiz97 omg both 10 and 11 is awesom is chap 12 coming soon sorry if i bother you but these stories are just womderful
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on January 20, 2021
chapter 10 is out. Just so you know
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YESH!
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on January 20, 2021
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on January 20, 2021
omg it was amazin ima wonder whether or not thier gona get married and have kids i bet chap 10 is even better
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xD hopefully it is
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on January 20, 2021
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on January 20, 2021
omg chap 8 was amazing do chap nine as soon as you can and i ship solus with ash
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just about to read chap 9
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on January 20, 2021
YAY! the first ship! ^w^
Chapter 9 is done
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on January 20, 2021
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on January 20, 2021
omg chap seven was awsome to i dont know how you do perfect stories
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if you need any more tips talk to me in a direct chat. thank you! btw its bottom to top. I had to split it up cause it was too big @moonston
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on January 20, 2021
I roleplayed for years in fantasy. I love writing descriptive things. And I am a artist. Normally I write poems cause their short and easy, and I lose motivation in stories over time, but cause you and a few others are being supportive its kept giving me motivation. And I love this story too. Just like all of you I'm addicted to it, except I'm writing it instead See More
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Another thing to help with writing stories is to be descriptive. Draw things out, put it in order, and try not to add any extra things that could change the direction you want it to go. Think of your favourite book, think of how they try to connect you with the characters, and use that. A good thing to do is suspense. for example...

Susie went on a walk across See More
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on January 20, 2021
If I put these two characters in different situations (for example and this isn't a part of the book) in a plane crash. Ash will probably freak out, but Solus being through a lot of different things and is quite acting in situations that might end badly would try to protect anyone at the cost of himself. He loses less when he gets hurt, cause he's immortal, but See More
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on January 20, 2021
The trick to writing better stories is to take it from the heart. Think about your characters thoughts, feelings, and personality. Imagine how each one would feel in each situation, and with eachother.
For example, Ash (which can be a boy or a girl), has problems with their magic, and feels like Solus is kind and mysterious. She thinks he is powerful, but holding See More
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on January 20, 2021
@BlueTheQuizWhiz97 maybe you can teach me how to write better stories and go check out my storie/script i made to see if its goo but yeah i love these stories heres the link to mine https://www.qfeast.com/story/iWODhi/mha-script-made-by-me
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on January 20, 2021
when is chater seven coming chap six was amazing
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@BlueTheQuizWhiz97 well if you wasnt sure about it im glad i gave a little clarification cause chap 6 was amazing
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Thank you so much. I really like everyones support, it inspires me to do better. oh, and chapter 7 is out. I just finished it @moonston
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on January 20, 2021
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on January 20, 2021
hopefully soon! ^w^
I'm really glad you like chapter 6, I wasn't sure about it
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on January 20, 2021
great i love chap 4
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on January 20, 2021
Yes I think it's a good idea to turn it into "I" perspective. And the story is amazing so far!! Keep up the great work love???
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^w^ thanks beautiful, I was accidentally turning "you" into "I" halfway through the last chapter so I think this will help
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on January 19, 2021
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on January 19, 2021
ok the third is very good too
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thanks! ^w^
did you see the authors note at the bottom?
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on January 19, 2021
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on January 19, 2021
love it very addicting
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thank you! 3rd chapter coming soon!
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on January 19, 2021
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on January 19, 2021
So good and addicting!
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thanks! ^w^✨
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Np!
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on January 19, 2021
when are you gonna continue
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rn actually. The chapters are long-ish
I'm glad you like the story, and I will happily take suggestions
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