Tormented Life

Tormented Life

After being homeschooled her whole life Fay decides she has had enough. Though already 15 she starts high school. What will happen to her. How will her mum take this change in life style.

published on June 02, 2014not completed

Daniel

Daniel I'm hugging my bare arms to keep warm. Its cold and raining. Now I wish I brought along a jumper. Then I see it. The black gates, rusting away from age. The building of my future. My school. I try to shove the gates open except fail due to the slipperiness from the rain. I bash my hand against the gate in frustration.
"I wouldn't do that if I were you," says a strange voice. I twist around to see a boy inside the gate, he has black hair, a black short sleeved hoody and jeans with a tear at the knee.
"Can you please let me in?" I question.
"You're new here aren't you?" He asks whilst dropping the coffee he was holding and standing up.
"Yeah, I'm Fay," I reply
"Im Daniel," he adds
Daniel starts unlocking the gate. When he looks up our eyes meet. His eyes are dark brown. Like chocolate. We stare into each other's eyes in silence. Finally he breaks the silence
"I Umm unlocked the umm gate"
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AWESOME STORY!!!!
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thanks! :D
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on July 06, 2014
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on July 05, 2014
PLEASE MAKE DAWN NICER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I CANNOT LIKE THE PERSON WHO IS ALREADY IN A SHIP!!!!!!!!!!! BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (Sorry about that)
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That, and she is like the biggest jerk in the entire story. WTH?
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thanks
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on July 04, 2014
Okay, apology accepted.
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on July 02, 2014
You know, I didn't want to spoil it for everyone else but my plan was to make Dawn nicer and nicer and eventually Dawn and Fay would be friends
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on July 02, 2014
:( look I said I was sorry
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on July 02, 2014
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on June 30, 2014
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on June 30, 2014
OMG I forgot about this story then I found it again! Yay! Awesome story, how come Dawn is rude and whatever? You didn't need to include my OC. Great story btw, I rated five stars!
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on June 29, 2014
sorry I didn't really know how to add Dawn in and I didn't want to let you down, if you want me to make her nicer I will
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on June 26, 2014
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on June 26, 2014
haha cool neontiger! but you forgot "We used to be best buddies, and now we're not, I wish you would tell me whyyyyyy!......do you wanna build a snowman? It doesn't have to be a snowman"
"Go away Anna"
"Ok byee.."
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[knock knock] Do you wanna build a snowman? Or ride our bikes around the halls? I think some company is overdue, I've started talking to the pictures on the walls!
Hang in there, Joan!
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Nuuhhhh nuuuhhh nuuuuhhh! (Sad music at end...:(()
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on June 14, 2014
"Elsa, please I know you're in there, people are asking where you've been, they say have courage, but im trying to, im right out here for you, just let me iiiiiiiiiin! We only have each other! It's just you and me, what are we gonna dooooo! do you wanna build a snowman
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on June 14, 2014
"See you in two weeks."
"Do you have to go?"
"You'll be fine, Elsa."
(sad music plays in background parents are leaving and then they DIE!! )
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on June 14, 2014
I gets a little lonely, all these empty rooms, just watching the hours tick byyy! *click clock click clock*

"I'm scared, it's getting stronger!"
"Getting upset only makes it worse, calm down" *steps toward Elsa*
"No! I don't wanna hurt you!"
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on June 14, 2014
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on June 14, 2014
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on June 14, 2014
Hah awesome when i read the words "Do you wanna build a snowman?" I started singing in my head, "Come on lets go and play, I never see you anymore, come out the door it's like you've gone awwwwaaayyyyyyy!"
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on June 14, 2014
Also MockingjayDistrict, I'm reading your story 'new girl' and it's amazing
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on June 05, 2014
Thanks MockingjayDistrict, I'll try and make a Dawn! :D
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on June 05, 2014
Wow, this is amazing! Please write more! Can I have a character named Dawn? If I can't that's fine. You're a really talented writer!!!!
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on June 04, 2014
Thanks guys!! :D
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on June 04, 2014
I know right NeonTiger
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on June 02, 2014
I love the art class chapter! But I have to admit, OUR art class teacher sounds NOTHING like her -_-
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on June 02, 2014
Thanks it's my first story
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on June 02, 2014
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on June 02, 2014
Aww thanks!!
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on June 02, 2014
LOVE IT!!! <3 <3 <3 :D
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on June 02, 2014