Heartbreak Girl

Heartbreak Girl

Luke dedicates his life to Lauren, the one who never sees the truth. Okay, so this is technically a Luke Hemmings fan fiction, but you don't have to know who Luke Hemmings or 5 Seconds of Summer are to understand it, because I'm just going to write it as a normal story. I hope you like it!

published on June 22, 2014completed

Chapter Amnesia

Chapter Amnesia
The party starts at seven. I act like I've forgotten about Luke - talking to Libby, laughing with Dawn and joking around with Amethyst - but he's actually on my mind the whole time. When will the Hemmings turn up? Will he notice me? Will he want to be friends with me again? But then I start wondering...will he come at all?

Ashton, Michael and Calum show up at around half eight. Ashton sneaks up behind me and hugs me. I squeal and hug him back. Calum and Michael are trying to impress Libby, Amethyst and Dawn, but they're finding them annoying. Well, I find them annoying too, but I love them anyway.

About half an hour later, I see Lydia at the other side of the room. If Lydia's here, then Luke might be. She'll probably know where he is, at least.
I push past the people, muttering apologies, until I reach Lydia. "Lydia!" I call out, and she turns around. "Oh, Lauren, hi!" she grins. "When did you get here?" I ask. I have to be polite to my best friend before I ask her about her brother. "Just a few minutes ago," she replies. "Are the rest of your family here?" "All except Ella," she answers, and suddenly my heart begins to race. "Where are they?" "Mom and dad went to go to talk to your parents," she tells me. "Lina should be somewhere around here, and I think Luke went into your kitchen."
He's in the kitchen. "I, um, have to go to the bathroom," I lie. "See you soon!" Lydia smiles.

I make my way to the kitchen. On the way, I see my cousin Kristine.
Kristine is probably my favourite cousin, if I had to choose. She's 13, four years younger than me, but she doesn't act it. If anything, she acts older than me. And she's so lovely. You can talk to her about anything at all.
"Kristine!" I shout. She looks around, and then notices me. "Lauren! I was looking for you!"
I push past a few people and stand next to her. "I didn't know you were coming," I exclaim excitedly. Kristine and her family live about an hour and a half away. "We came down this morning," she tells me. "How long are you staying for?" "About a week, I think," she says. "It's great that the summer holidays have started!"
I nod, agreeing with her. "Well, I should go," I say. "I'll see you later!" "Bye!" she smiles.

I walk out the door and into the kitchen. Just as Lydia said, Luke is there. He's glancing around the room, and doesn't see me. "Luke," I say softly. He looks over in my direction, then looks away. I sigh, and walk over to him.

"Luke, please listen to me. We've been best friends for fourteen years. FOURTEEN years, Luke. You've known me longer than you've known some of your family. It's like we are family, Luke. You can't just abandon me, like all those years meant nothing to you. Well, maybe they did mean nothing to you. But they meant so much to me. It would hurt me less if you just hit me right now, and maybe you're thinking about it. But I don't care if you do, because I love you, Luke, and I always will."

He finally looks up. "You love me?" he asks, bewildered. "Of course," I smile. "You're the best friend I could ever have."
He bites his lip. "Oh," he whispers. "Well, Lauren, I'm sorry, but I can't bear to see you with Ashton when I know that there's someone so much better for you."
I laugh. "I'd love to meet him," I say.
"You already have," Luke says quietly. "You've known him for fourteen years."
Fourteen years. The puzzle pieces slide into place in my mind. It's Luke. He's talking about himself.

"I love you, Lauren," he admits. "I've had a crush on you since the first day we met, and when we kissed at that party when we were thirteen, I realised that I'm in love with you. And you obviously don't feel the same way, but at least now you know."

I stare up at Luke. How could I be so stupid? Of course. All those times I caught him staring at me, all those times he blushed when I said how grateful I was to have him...it all makes sense now.
And the biggest thing I realise is that Luke is right. There's no one better for me than Luke Hemmings. I realise that I love him too. I don't know if I always have or if it's just now, but those details don't matter.
"I love you too, Luke," I say, almost inaudibly, but Luke must hear because he grins. That adorable smile. "You have no idea how many times I've wished you would say that," he tells me.
And then he's kissing me, for the second time. And like the first time, I feel like we're the only two people in the world. I know that the party is still going on in the next room, and that someone could walk in on us at any moment, but I don't care. I don't care, because Luke Robert Hemmings is the only person that matters to me. I can't understand how I didn't see it before.

A/N: So there it is!! :D I really hope you like reading this chapter, because I absolutely loved writing it! :D
There will be some drama in the next chapter, as you can imagine! ;) So please continue reading, it means so much to me!
And if you don't mind, could you PLEASE tell me what you thought of this chapter in the comments? It's okay if you don't want to!

Thank you SO SO SO SO much for reading, and sticking with the story for this long, I love you all!!

P.S. I hid part of a line from a 5SOS song in this chapter. Please tell me if you find it, and what it is! ;)
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This story reminds me of a fanfic I've been drawing...
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:"> not:x
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on October 24, 2015
I'm sorry but y Ben and Jack? They're like my friends, and i used to have a crush on 1 of them.:x
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on October 24, 2015
No, I like how at first Lauren liked Ashton! It makes it more tense. :)
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You know, for Luke.
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I don't recommend shipping Ashton and Lauren X-(
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on July 23, 2014
And what do you mean Lauren's more attractive like that? :D
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on July 23, 2014
True, but I had to please the Luren shippers - especially @MockingjayDistrict, who would kill me if I didn't have a happy ending for Luren haha!! :D
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on July 23, 2014
Also, Lauren is even more attractive like that.
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on July 22, 2014
AWESOME!!! This story was lovely!!!!
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Aw, thank you so much!! :D :D
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on July 11, 2014
Can I have an OC if I'm not too late? If I can:
Name: Jocelyn
Age: 10
Appearance: 5 feet tall, color changing eyes, shoulder length brown hair, and lots of freckles across her nose under her eyes and on her cheek(face cheeks don't be weird)
Personality: A little weird, funny, kind, LOVES animals, LOVES video games, can be quiet and mysterious at times, and is See More
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I am so sorry, I am literally JUST about to finish this story!! :(( But I'll be starting a new fan fiction in a few days, maybe if you like that one you could create an OC? :D
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The storyline will be different though!! :D ;) You won't find out much about the girl's life and backstory in Try Hard. And anyway, you might not want an OC! You might hate it!! :D :D
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on July 11, 2014
LOL just put the same OC LOL :D
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on July 11, 2014
Poor Calum! :(( BESIDES THAT...
AWEEEESSSSOOOOMMMEEEEEDD
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Yeah, I know, right?? I feel so bad for Calum!! :( Okay, that's weird, because I'm the one writing it... :P Anyway, I'd like to know, do you think you would read Try Hard? :D
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Only about two. I actually have the ending all worked out!! :D
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on July 10, 2014
How many more chapters in this story?!
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on July 10, 2014
Yay!! Thanks!! :D :D
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on July 10, 2014
Yea!! Of course
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on July 10, 2014
AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME!!!
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Thank you!! :D Just wondering - will you be reading Try Hard? :D
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on July 10, 2014
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on July 10, 2014
WHAT?!?!
OMG PLZ PLZ GET TO THE END OF HEARTBREAK GIRL FIRST THOUGH!!!
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Yeah, of course I will!! :D :D There's still a few chapters left!! Would you read the new fan fiction, though?
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Thank you!!!! :D :D :D I'm planning on having completely new characters - except for the boys, obviously! ;) And a different story-line, of course! :D
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on July 10, 2014
OF COURSE I WOULD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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on July 10, 2014
Awesome chapter! This is getting intense OMG!!!! Thanks a ton fot mentioning me!!!!!!
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Haha, thanks!!! :D :D And like I said I mentioned all my most caring and dedicated readers, and you're definitely one of them!! :D You take it all so seriously!! And you're my Luren shipping buddy! ;)
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on July 09, 2014
AWEEEEEESSSSSOOOOOMMMMMMMEEEE
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Thank you!!!! :D :D
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on July 09, 2014
DA FEELS IN CHAPTER 20!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
And thank YOU for writing this story in the first place!!!
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Aw, thank you so much!!!! :D :D :D :D
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on July 09, 2014
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on July 09, 2014
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LUREN FOREVER!!!!!!!!!! THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WWWWWWWWWWWOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I'm so glad that you liked it!! :D :D
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Ur welcome
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on July 08, 2014
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on July 08, 2014
What happened to Ashton? They never broke up o.o
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But were they ever officially together? ;) You'll find out in the next chapter! :D
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You think you know what? Tell me in private message! :D
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on July 07, 2014
OMG i think i know... I'm not sure though
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on July 07, 2014
!!!!!!!!!! I WANT TO READ MORE NOW
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on July 07, 2014
OMG THEY'RE FRIENDS AGAIN AND THEY'RE TOGETHER WOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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on July 07, 2014
MOOORE! I'm so excited! :D
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on July 07, 2014
WRITE MORE PLEASE
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on July 07, 2014
I'm the only Ashton+Lauren shipper...
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X-(

NOOOO!
Luren shall prevail!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!
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on July 07, 2014
Haha, yeah!! :D Well, I kind of ship Ashren. But don't you ship Luren too???
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:(( Well, that's your own opinion!! :D And I'm so glad you have an opinion!! :D
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on July 06, 2014
I ship both i guess, but Luke is acting pretty self-centered
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on July 06, 2014
This is the best book i have ever read love it! And i whish Lydia kicked Callum out of her room with her heals
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Oh my God thank you so much!!!! And I'm very sorry that didn't happen!!
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Remember never say you aren't beautiful because pretty girls who do not know it are more attractive than Gorgeous girls who flaunt it:D Bye and UPDATE!:p
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on July 05, 2014
Haha, okay, bye!!!
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on July 05, 2014
Aw do not say that every one is beautiful in their own ways! Well i got to go and let's hope you updated more about me like way more and bye!!!!
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on July 05, 2014
Aw thanks!!!! :D :D But seriously, you don't know what i look like - I am SO not pretty!!!!! :O :O :O
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on July 05, 2014
Not in a lesbian way by the way:p
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on July 05, 2014
I know i am* Flips hair* Just joking! Well you are welcome dear anything for my dearest Author! You are so amazing and i think pretty:) I don't know why you are still single and do not have boys always following you around i am absolutely in love with your personality
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on July 05, 2014
Sorry, I just had to reference 5SOS. :D
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OH MY GOD OH MY GOD I AM CRYING YOU HAVE ABSOLUTELY NO IEA HOW MUCH THAT MEANS TO ME THNK YOU SO SO SO MUCH YOU'RE JUST TOO NICE!!!!
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on July 05, 2014
Why wouldn't i? This is the most Amazing story i have read in my entire life and even when i am thirty and have children i will make them read it:)
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on July 05, 2014
Ah thank you thank you thank you THANK YOU!!!!!! You're so kind!! I'm honoured that you read this - and actually like it!!!
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on July 05, 2014
Yay! You are such a caring Author always thinking about your reader's feelings and thoughts:D
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on July 05, 2014
I'm thinking of including as many of the OCs as possible in the next chapter! :D
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on July 05, 2014
Can Lydia BE IN IT MORE PLEASE?
Sorry for Caps Lock:p
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on July 05, 2014
Haha, thanks!! :D And yeah, Luren is the most popular ship!! :D :D
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on July 05, 2014
It is aright but i like your idea so much better! And noh my god i really Luve Luren!
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on July 05, 2014
Write more quickly, you must fix this mess I call Luren!!!!!
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Haha!!! :D I'll try my best!
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on July 05, 2014
OMG OMG WRITE MORE THIS IS AWESOME MORE MORE WRITE WRITE QUICKLY
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Aw, thank you so, so much!!!
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on July 04, 2014
OMG chapter Tobiasteen is killing me!!!!!!
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Haha!! :D Just checking, you mean it's good, right? ;)
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Okay that was weird :P
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on July 03, 2014
Yay!! :D I really loved the idea!! :D Now the Luren ship is sailing along in the Ashren sea...
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on July 03, 2014
Yeah, I love it!
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on July 03, 2014
I WANT TO CRY FROM READING CHAPTER 14!!!!
THAT IS SO SWEET!!!!
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Aw, thank you!!! :D :D :D
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on July 03, 2014
Omg!!!! I actually ship Ash and Lauren though :/
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LUREN FOREVER!!!
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on July 03, 2014
No, I just guessed. ;)
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on July 03, 2014
Was I that obvious? :P
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on July 03, 2014
I see that you weren't happy with that comment!! ;)
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on July 03, 2014
I think you're like the only Ashren shipper haha!! :D Well, I kind of ship it. :D
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Lol! I know! :D
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on July 02, 2014
Hey guys! Well my dear friend the person who made this story allowed me too make a roleplay about it and i will ver soon hope you join the role play!
Famous aurthor is out now! bye and if you want me too follow you write something to my wall or follow me i always follow back by the way
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on July 01, 2014
Yay you posted why Ella hates Lauren! And you included my reason! Now, let me get back to shipping Luren...
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Haha!! :D I loved your reason, so I just had to include it! And shipping Luren is a full-time job, isn't it? Not as easy as it seems!! :D
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Haha, it's awesome!!
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on July 01, 2014
Yup! *ship ship ship ship* Ship sliding away, ship sliding awaaaaaaaaay, I'll forever be shipping Luren and now I'm ship sliding away... (LOL that was a parody I came up with on the spot to Slip SLiding Away)
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on July 01, 2014
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on July 01, 2014
But, Lauren actually is nice...
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Haha!! :D I'll tell you in private message! ;)
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on July 01, 2014
Wait, what? Explain further!!!!!!!!!!! Wait, did you just do a... RICK HANGER?!?!?!?!
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on July 01, 2014
No, poor LAUREN! :D Ella isn't alone, she has her family and friends...oh, wait, her family hates her and she has no friends. I guess she is alone! :D
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on July 01, 2014
Wow... poor Ella.
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on July 01, 2014
Yeah, she's genuinely that sweet. But Ella is desperate for a reason to hate her, so she convinced herself that Lauren is actually awful and out to get everyone.
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on July 01, 2014
You have 105 reads! WRITE THE TEASER NOW LADY!!!!!!!!!!
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Haha I'll do it as soon as possible!!
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on June 30, 2014
OMG!!!!!!! I know what happpeeennnss.... I think. :-O
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Private message me your theory!!
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on June 30, 2014
Luren is a great ship name for Luke and Lauren!
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on June 30, 2014
Wait, I think I know why Ella hates Lauren: She knows Luke likes her, and is mad that she is so COMPLETELY OBLIVIOUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (Note the all caps part).
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Haha, good theory!! :D No spoilers yet, though!
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It will be revealed in the teaser!!
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on June 30, 2014
AM I RIGHT OR LEFT?!?!
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