Unforgiven

Unforgiven

I died yesterday. I'm not accepted into heaven. But I still have a chance to get in. Why I'm not accepted, you ask? I died doing bad. I died killing my best friend. If that makes any sense. I must prove myself worthy by doing good. But not just any good deed. I must be sent back in time, to stop myself ever meeting my best friend and stop myself from being over powered by greed and manipulation.

published on October 12, 2014not completed

Lord Pocheco

"Damian, Tyler, what seems to be the problem?" Comes a voice from behind me. I spin around.
"Eli, hi," I say, happy to see someone sane. Eli completely ignores me, his focus is fixed on the boys, I guess the boy with auburn hair and brown eyes is Tyler.
"I am NOT watching over HER!" Damian complains.
"What's the reason for that?" Eli asks with a straight experessions and flat tone.
"She's annoying and rude!!" Damian explains. I cross my arms and glare. My blue eyes narrowing.
"Then again, so are you," Eli tells Damian. I uncross my arms. Damian looks angrily at Eli.
"Well, I , ugh," Damian continues making annoyed noices.
"You can't insult me Daminan Ikioano, otherwise, I will be deeply upset," Eli says, still with a flat tone. Normally, when someone says that, you don't give a damn, but the way he said it, it makes you want to shut the hell up and run away. Damian suddenly bows.
"S-sorry Lord Pocheco," He stammers. Lord Pocheco? God, this day just keeps getting crazier. I wonder if Dominick is still mad at me, I wonder, just maybe, is he grieving my death. No, I remember the look on his face when I tried to kill him, when I ended up dead. He couldn't care less.

"Damian, your behaviour has been horrible, you shall not continue on Night Duty, Tyler, you shall help me, and we will be the Night Watch people," Eli explains.
"Yes Lord Pocheco," Damian and Tyler say in unison. Okay, what is it with this Lord Pocheco business? Damian spreads out his wings and flies off into the distance.
"Tyler, please go alert the council that Damain is no longer on Night Duty," Tyler, as well, flies off. Perhaps I should be calling Eli, Lord Pocheco as well, couldn't hurt to try.

"Umm L-Lord Pocheco?" I stammer. Eli makes a confused sound, but then realises who I was.
"It's just Eli," he tells me. Eli smiles warmly. "Eli Pocheco,"
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Beautiful simply marvelous!
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on March 23, 2016
Awesome!!
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on December 10, 2014
Love. Love. LOVE IT! :)
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on December 10, 2014
Really awesome! Some minor spelling mistakes, but great writing!
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Yeah, I noticed them but haven't had time to go through and fix them. :)
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on December 09, 2014
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on December 09, 2014
Yay!! :D
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on December 09, 2014
Awesome new update! Write more soon!
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on December 08, 2014
Write more!!!!!!
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on October 20, 2014
Awesome! (Yes! I finally read it! ;) :P )
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on October 20, 2014
Love it
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on October 18, 2014
Write more soon!
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on October 15, 2014
Dark, but seems like an interesting plot!
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on October 14, 2014
I like it :) it's different write more!
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on October 12, 2014
Dark but cool
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on October 12, 2014
Too dark for my taste
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on October 12, 2014
AMAZING!!!!!!
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on October 12, 2014