Cant Escape

This is a Story that will have you looking around you in fright.(Highly recommended to read in the dark). Btw the hotel in this story is a real haunted hotel in L.A I don't know how many floors their are or if their is one haunted room sorry if im wrong.

published on July 16, 2015not completed

What to do

"Where back" Isaiah yelled, "Guys where are you" I said, "In here" Rylee said. We walked in Isaiah's room and there they where standing there paralyzed not moving with their jaws open and eyes wide. "What the heck" Isaiah said. I snapped my fingers in their faces and they where back to normal." What the heck" Hanna said, Hailey said after " I feel sick", "I feel light headed" Gracie said then she passed out. "OMG Isaiah call 911, Hailey call the front desk to complain Rylee go with her, Hanna get the emercancy kit, and I will check her pulse and give her CPR" I screamed.
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BTW where is can't escape 2
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I haven't made it yet with my busy stuff
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on October 09, 2015
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on July 17, 2015
I <3 it
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on July 17, 2015
f u im blocking you
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on July 16, 2015
f u read my age 11
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Age doesn't matter when someone writes a story
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on July 16, 2015
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on July 16, 2015
im 11 and I wrought this
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I just believe that if you want to be a good author then those tips will help, and I'm sorry if this comes out as offensive or rude.
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on July 16, 2015
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on July 16, 2015
And I don't need your pointers
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on July 16, 2015
first off I did full spell check on everything and there is going to be 4 more of theseX-(
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on July 16, 2015
It's okay, just need spelling check and put the story into more paragraphs. Each time a person talks, it should start a new paragraph.
But hey, it's your story, it's how you want it. I thought you'd like some pointers
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And as in spell check, I mean the different uses of words like you used "where" instead of "we're"
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