Cant Escape

This is a Story that will have you looking around you in fright.(Highly recommended to read in the dark). Btw the hotel in this story is a real haunted hotel in L.A I don't know how many floors their are or if their is one haunted room sorry if im wrong.

published on July 16, 2015not completed

Day two

We woke up and called the front desk luckily Ericka was not working it was a guy named Hunter. "Hello how may I help you" the man said, Rylee replied" Yes in the middle of the night one of are bathroom lights came on" the man replied " would you like me to send someone up", "Yes thank you we are in room 506". A few minutes later a guy came up to look at the bath room he said the lights where okay and Isaiah probably imagined it.

"See Isaiah you probably imagined it" Hailey said." Oh fine be quiet Hailey, by the way I'm sleeping on the couch again, "Fine" I said. Later that day me and Isaiah went to go get Taco Bell to get everyone dinner.(At the hotel) "So what do you guys want to do"  Hanna said, "Don't know" everyone said. All of a  sudden they heard voices. "What the heck" Rylee said," Where is those voices coming from" Hailey said after Rylee." I think they are coming from Isaiah's room" Gracie replied, "Lets check it out" Hanna said frighten. They walked in his room the television was on, "What in the world, no one has been in here all day" Gracie said.
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BTW where is can't escape 2
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I haven't made it yet with my busy stuff
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on October 09, 2015
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on July 17, 2015
I <3 it
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on July 17, 2015
f u im blocking you
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on July 16, 2015
f u read my age 11
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Age doesn't matter when someone writes a story
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on July 16, 2015
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on July 16, 2015
im 11 and I wrought this
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I just believe that if you want to be a good author then those tips will help, and I'm sorry if this comes out as offensive or rude.
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on July 16, 2015
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on July 16, 2015
And I don't need your pointers
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on July 16, 2015
first off I did full spell check on everything and there is going to be 4 more of theseX-(
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on July 16, 2015
It's okay, just need spelling check and put the story into more paragraphs. Each time a person talks, it should start a new paragraph.
But hey, it's your story, it's how you want it. I thought you'd like some pointers
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And as in spell check, I mean the different uses of words like you used "where" instead of "we're"
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