The Visitors

A teenage girl suddenly developes the ability to see, and talk to ghosts. She learns she has several ghosts living in her house. This is part of an ongoing series to continue for a while.

published on July 07, 2015not completed

The haunting past

The next day...
   I didn't see Elizabeth, Caitlyn, or Dan all today.I wonder where they are? Dan enters the room.I blurt out without thinking "Where were you"? He replies "Why I didn't expect anyone to notice... I was at the supernatural creature council"."Why"? I ask. "They wanted me to possess someone, but I turned the job down.
   They wanted me to possess you, but you're half ghist now. I can't tell them that". Maybe this was a mistake..." Why did he say that? I blurt out"No. It wasn't I've haven't  really had a friend in so nany years"! He quietly mutters "I really made someone... Happy"...? It really broke my heart to hear that. What was his life like? I wonder how he died...
   "Um... Dan, I know this is out of nowhere, but how did you die"? My curiosity got the best if me. Dan looked  like he eas about to cry.He answered " I committed... suicide. I didn't know I'd just live forever as a ghost"...! He started tearing up. "For a month after I died I watched over my family. My older brother was happy I was finally out of his life. My Father didn't find out I don't even know if he found out yet. Hr lived away from me, and my mom. My mother... I don't know she might be sad, but she didn't show it one bit so I don't know...
   Dan was heavily crying. I felt so horrible to make him think about that. I'm so curious though I can't help myself. "Dan, why did you commit suicide"? He didn't say anything for a minute. He finally responded "Well I really loved my dad, but was never allowed to see him. My mom was jealous because he always loved me more than anyone. So I wasn't allowed to see him because of sone petty feeling. Lastly I was constantly  verbally abused by my mom, and physically abused by my brother"...
   Dan was crying really hard. I felt bad for asking, but I want to help so bad. What can I do? If anything... Dan disappeared into thin air.
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Nice. I love the plot. I hate to be that one girl, but there are a few grammar errors. Other than that, 10/10.
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Love your story
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on July 08, 2015
Looking good!
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on July 07, 2015
Wow! Ur an AWESOME writer!
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