Nightmares.
He awoke in his 'dream' by a horrid melody of disharmony. He reeled his cat ears back and screamed, for it was too loud to listen to. The young boy's instinct was to run. So, he ran. Distorted figures of his family and friends popped up.Malaria had blood dripping from her muzzle and her eyes seemed lifeless. She made a sudden roar of pain as if something bit her, and blood dripped from the horned cat's neck and then Anadromea faded in, she looked happy at first, but then was sobbing heavily. Tears ran down her now red cheeks. Then the professional girl popped up, she looked cheery and rather happy as well then she faded into a smirking, bloodstained, hellish being. Blood stained her hands, top, and face. His family appeared, they looked to be shunning him then his mother calling someone.
Amer's face was sodden with tears. Then a voice called out... "There will be one who will betray and one might do the same, your only friend will fall to the hands of you enemy, but you might save them if you take the soul of what you needed to exist..." Then the boy awoke, sweating heavily.
Anadromea slowly awoke to the jolt of her new comrade. "Are.. Are you alright...?" She said to him, softly, innocently..
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In paragraph one it says"The whole room was silent." I suggest that you be more See More descriptive and replace the sentence with "The whole room was filled with eerie silence that grow more terrifying by as each second passed in absolute silence."
Lastly, in paragraph 5 it says"His parents stood in fear. Then explained to him. The more they explained. The more angry he grew..."
I suggest that you replace it with" his parents stood in agonizing terror as they admitted the secret they had longed to keep from him; he is a parasite. The more they explained the angrier he felt. The rage pumping through his veins like toxic venom."
I hope you liked my suggestions, and that you continue to write!
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