Description
Along with a good title, must come a good description.Examples of good descriptions:
(Title: Chewy) (author: Bruce Klein)
Chewy had been a stray since he was a puppy. Sometimes he travelled with other street dogs, but more often he made his rounds alone. Bruce began to feed this huge, loveable, timid animal, and he soon met other locals who looked out for Chewy too.
The neighbours saw Chewy shivering in the winter rain, and knew it would only be a matter of time until the local animal control put him down. Bruce was happy take him home but Chewy was big and frightened. Rescuing him wouldn't be simple - the neighbours had to devise a plan...
Here are examples from qfeasters:
(Title: 14 Wishes That Never Came True) (author: Ravenheart211)
Ginger thought that the birthdays, the presents, the cake, they never meant anything. Until now, she lived her life alone. But soon she realizes those wishes mean a lot more than they seem.
(Title: The Road to Power) (author: DaNerdBird)
Abigail Taylor was born with magic - but she's having trouble getting it to work. Maybe it's for the best. Magic doesn't always work out well. One morning, she wakes up to learn that her parents have disappeared - and she's far away from home. Alone and confused, she and her sister have to make it to safety and find out what happened to their parents - all while staying out of sight. It won't be easy. But Abigail is determined. And it's amazing what a magician can accomplish when they put their mind to it.
Tips for a good description:
-try to somewhat introduce the problem of the story in the description (e.g But a dark force lurks, threatening the existence of the human race)
-don't over spoil the story (e.g In the end, the great hero John slays the evil dragon)
-try to introduce the hero (Yuna is a fourteen year old girl who lives in a shed with her little brother)
-any notes irrelevant to the description should be in brackets (This is my first story, I hope you enjoy it)
-have good spelling and grammar in your description, bad spelling and grammar makes you look unappealing to the audience
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DON'T:
-if you're writing a novel, don't directly address the audience (e.g Hey Qfeasters I wrote this story about my brother, I'd like some feedback) (if you need to directly address your audience, have a chapter titled 'Author's note')
-have a description irrelevant to the plot
-include 'so yea... ,Hope you like it, don't judge, etc.
-ask for followers
Examples of bad descriptions (none of these are actual descriptions)
This is the story of my OC Rachel the fox and how she met shadow and how she saved the world. I'm only twelve so don't judge, soz
This is the story of Featherheart and how she was born, pleas enjoy and if you like pls fave and comment
The description is what most people will judge your story on, make sure it's good!
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First person and Third person. You need to know when to use it, which can intensify the story more, and which can make the reader feel more involved.
I'll drop by and read your stories.