The Unleashed

The Unleashed

This is a story that is about my created character, Jack Lee. Jack Lee will battle alot of evil things like demons, angels, vampires, etc. This is my #1 story so i hope you all like it.

published on March 27, 2013completed

Chapter 4: Vanessa Marshals

Chapter 4: Vanessa Marshals
They blind folded Jack and pt him into a van and drove off. About 45 minutes later, the van stopped. Jack was led into a building where the blind fold was removed.
The place was very advanced in technology. There were machines and computers everywhere.
"Welcome to headquarters," Jon said. "Come. We will leave you to your partner."
They led Jack to a room. Jon knocked on the door.
Jack looked around and saw a .45 and a samurai sword on a shelf near the desk.
The chair turned around. Sitting in the chair was a girl who looked like Alecia Beth Moore, AKA P!NK. Her hair, however, was a little darker, but that was the only real difference. Her clothes were black and she was about 5 foot 7.
"So," She said. "You are Jack Lee?"
"Yes I am," Jack replied.
"My name is Vanessa Marshals," she told him. "I've been in this organization for five years now. I am the very best, and I dont say that out of arrogance. I say it because I have earned it. I am the most respected hunter here. I am nicknamed the 'deadliest woman'."
Vanessa stood up and walked over to Jack.
"You seem like a strong man, Jack," Vanessa told him. "You are definelty fit to be my partner. That outfit of yours could use some changes. You are going to want something more comfortable."
"Are you going to train me?" Jack asked.
"Indeed I will," Vanessa replied. "Lets go over a few things first. Number one, do not question my judgement unless you truely have a better way. Because if you piss me off, it will result in an ass kickin. Number two, if you betray me, you may as well kill yourself because I will torture you first. Now then, the missions are your training. You will learn to fight. Since you know martial arts, you wont need alot of training. Now lets got get your outfit."
Vanessa led Jack out of the room.
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I feel like there are too many characters for a short story. ._.
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on April 27, 2013
I like it the ending was very sweet where Farrah came back lol a gift from God =) I like that lol and the sequal thing if up to you lol I just go with the flow lol
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on April 10, 2013
It's good just remember to keep an eye out for your spelling lol
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on April 03, 2013
Very good start off because it foes right to the action. This story is the type to keep u on the edge of your seat and just haves u thirsty for more lol. But one thing u wanna do Ant is since this is just writing, you don't have to put *'s when you wrote out a cuss word. But other than that, I like it so far
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on April 02, 2013
Sounds good =)
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on March 27, 2013