This is my story that I'm working on, plz help coz dont know what 2 do 4 rest

This is my story that I'm working on, plz help coz dont know what 2 do 4 rest

Now dont go hard on me coz im only 9, I love writing stories but sometimes I get stuck, and i've beens tuck on this story for aaaages but i need your help to finish it.

published on February 25, 2013not completed

Dont creak!

When I woke up on Monday morning I realized that my brother, Frank or my sister, Ashley weren’t in their beds! So I crept downstairs ever so ever so quietly, knowing that if I even stamped hard on one of the floorboards underneath the furry white carpet, then I would be in big trouble, because it was a Saturday and mum and dad would go crazy if I  woke them.
I walked down the stairs silently and went into the dining room.
There they were gobbling up cereal, Frank coco pops and Ashley rice crispies. We all stood there staring at one another, Frank with thick hair lumped onto his chubby face and his fringe covering his enormous emerald eyes. His wide mouth was munching and his giant nose was letting snot dribble down his filtrum (the part underneath your nose) he was wearing a lime green  PJ top with bright yellow PJ bottoms and slippers that squeaked every time you put your foot down so they weren’t very good for going past mum and dad’s room! Ashley had thick black hair that hung loose round her shoulders and her shining blue eyes swept the room so quickly they blurred, she had bright red lips that she hated because it looked like she was wearing lipstick. She was wearing a pirate PJ t-shirt with black trousers to match, she wasn’t wearing any slippers. And then there was me well I was the blondie of the family, no one else was blonde it was just me. I had a tanned face with bright red cheeks and blue eyes. My peach lips were pressed firmly together and I was wearing a tatty teddy nightie I was about to talk but then there was a wail, the baby Ash you get the milk ready and I’ll bring the baby down oh and Frank you get the high chair out of the airing cupboard!
I raced up the stairs and through the door of mum and dad’s bedroom. Mum was already murmuring, that was a bad sign and dad had his head under is pillow even more of a bad sign. I crept up to the baby, picked her gently up and then went out of the door silently just as mum sat up. I went downstairs slowly and into the dining room when I was waiting for the milk to cool ,I stared at Hector, the baby I stared at him I don’t know why I just stared at his mass of brown curls and his mouth in a sad face the shape of a sideways banana and his light blue eyes like mine with his perfect little nose and rosy red cheeks.
“Where is Frank?” I asked.
“Err he went in the airing cupboard then the highchair fell out and well that’s it.” Replied Ashley in her boyish tone.
Waaaaaaaaaaa! Cried the baby.
“Oh all right”. I moaned as I reached for the milk.
As I pressed the sucker against his lips a little head poked through the door.
“What you doing?” asked Bella.
“Feeding the baby and woohoo it’s your birthday today!” I whispered.
“Pwesents?” whispered back Bella.
“Yep!” cried mum! As she raced through the door carrying a huge parcel.
“Happy 3rd   birthday!” shouted dad following on from mum.
“Come on Ash let’s take Bella and Hector and try and find Frank while mum and dad set up the presents and make breakie!”
“Sure.” agreed  Ashley
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Wow, I really like this story! Yeah, they could go on an adventure in Candy Land and they have to save Candy Land from an evil gummy bear that has an evil plan to turn the world into gummy bears and form an army. If you need more help, message me.
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on March 16, 2013
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on February 27, 2013
well
maybe later or smthin i got schooooooooooooooooooool
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on February 27, 2013
thx thats a great idea! I'll finish it now!
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on February 27, 2013
that was a really good story so far! especially for a 9 year old! well done! you could add more accurate punctuation and remember to use speech marks too...what could happen next? right...um...your characters could meet a magical creature (maybe a fairy) and it could lead them to the rightful leader of the world and say that the sweet world is in danger of becoming See More
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on February 25, 2013