The Damaged

The Damaged

I would be sixteen in just one year, in 4782, and I wish people would stop treating me like a kid. I would get my right to own a house in a year, even if I did have to build it myself. Its not like I minded; I wasn't weak or lazy at all. If I was, I would have been voted off already. This was the last year I had to survive, then they couldn't take me off anymore. I would be free to do the voting. Sadly, last year, I was put into the running. I had really stepped up my game when I narrowly escaped. I hoped that was enough to keep me in this year. [Copyright: Please do not use my ideas, quotes, the setting, the characters, or any of the terms of my story without asking me permission first.]

published on July 05, 2014not completed

The Second Challenge

I was still shaking from the last challenge when they led us back to the same lake the next day.  I thought it was strange that they were going to make us do the same challenge twice, but I didn't know what they were actually doing.

"Line up!"  The guard yelled, "Get a partner about your same age, height and weight."  I did as he said and found myself with a girl that looked almost exactly like me.  She was from JFWL, judging from the wooding symbol on her uniform.

"Hi.  I', Calya."  I said.

"I'm Alyke."  She introduced herself.  I smiled at her.  The guard came around and told us to put our hands behind our back, where he bound them together with not-quite-handcuff looking things.

"You will get in the lake with your partner,"  He explained, "And try to keep each other afloat.  There is a platform currently raised for you to walk across to the center of the lake.  Survive."  He lined us up and sent us on our way.  I realized something; there were seventy-five of us.  One of us didn't have a partner, or three of us had an extra body.  I tried to yell and ask if that was fair, but I was kicked in the shins by the girl behind me,

"Do you want to get us all disqualified?"  She shriek whispered.  I love how she said 'disqualified' instead of 'killed'.  "Shut your face and just be glad that it isn't you.  It's not your problem, red.  Leave it be."  My hair was brown, not red.  For some reason, a lot of people made that mistake. Still, I shut my mouth and marched with the rest of these zombies to the middle of the lake.  

The familiar count down beeping started and I grabbed Alyke under the arms, and she got me by the waist.  The final buzzer went and we dropped almost immediately.  The currents came and tried to pull me under, but Alyke kept hold of me and hoisted me up.  Then it came for her.  I kicked frantically and pushed her up with all my strength.  Her head came out of the filthy water as we struggled to hold ourselves up long enough to save each other.

People were screaming around us, but all I heard was the blood pounding in my ears alternating with the pulsing water.  All I knew was that Alyke and I had to stay above water.  I heard drums beating, five times for every death, and each one terrified me.  I lost count of how many after fifty.  That was ten deaths in the water that was trying to kill me right now.  The probability of my survival was slim to none.

Suddenly an especially strong current yanked me under, out of Alyke's grasp.  I was pulled under the unusually dark water.  My lungs were on fire, and I had to take a breath.  The water filled my lungs until they burned like acid, and dark spots obscured my vision.  I was vaguely aware of Alyke trying to haul me up to the surface.  The pressure was too much, and I lost consciousness from lack of oxygen, and slowly sank to the bottom with my five drumbeats ringing in my ears.
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Awesome story. Pwz write more
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:) I will write more tomorrow cuz its late here same for The Mysterious Hero story <3 thanks
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on September 13, 2014
Sweet plot twist love it:D
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on August 26, 2014
sorry people! My everything has been down for waaaayyyyy too long! I'm going to write as fast . As I can and hope my English is still ok because I've been in Greece for too long!
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on August 14, 2014
Cool, write more.
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on August 12, 2014
Wow
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Ill take that as a "more plz" ?
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:D
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on July 12, 2014
Yup
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on July 12, 2014
Plz update soon I luv this story:D
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Thnx. Its just really hard to keep up with all my others stories as well. I'll try to update soon. :D @Aliyss
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on July 11, 2014
O my god u r such a good writer
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AWWW! Thank you soooo much! :D
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on July 08, 2014
Can't wait for the next chapter
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@Aliyss done another.
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on July 07, 2014
@Aliyss I did another chapter
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on July 07, 2014
That was amazing could you please wright more soon
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awwwwwww. thnx. more is coming soon. :)
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