The Damaged

The Damaged

I would be sixteen in just one year, in 4782, and I wish people would stop treating me like a kid. I would get my right to own a house in a year, even if I did have to build it myself. Its not like I minded; I wasn't weak or lazy at all. If I was, I would have been voted off already. This was the last year I had to survive, then they couldn't take me off anymore. I would be free to do the voting. Sadly, last year, I was put into the running. I had really stepped up my game when I narrowly escaped. I hoped that was enough to keep me in this year. [Copyright: Please do not use my ideas, quotes, the setting, the characters, or any of the terms of my story without asking me permission first.]

published on July 05, 2014not completed

The First Challenge

The First Challenge
I spent the night in the room in the Upper building with the rest of the Picked from my Lodge.  I didn't sleep at all, and neither did anyone else.  How could we sleep with the probability of us dying tomorrow.  They lined us up and gave us all new clothes, wet suit like outfits with out Legionnaire Symbol on the stomach.  We were led out to a large pit filled with water.  It was not the kind of water you like to swim in.  There was a long thick wire running across it with a platform suspended below it.  They were filing people onto it, and I thought I saw hinges.

I was taken up, and I somehow ended up close to the middle.  Everyone started to hold on, so I did as well.  There was a beep, then another, and one more then I heard a gunshot and the floor fell down.  A few people who hadn't held on fell right away, and the drop was far enough to kill.  Only one of the seven I saw fall broke the surface, but then they were pulled under that nasty pool with a strong current mixed with a whirlpool.

I got the message that I didn't want to fall.  Some people were dropping around me.  Of the hundred that walked up here, maybe ninety were left.  Another guy fell, about eight years old.  He shouldn't have to die so young.  Someone on the end from the Army Sector, a fifteen year old boy I recognized as Frenton, had started bounding up and down on the wire.  It was shaking me slowly loose, and others weren't so lucky to hold on that long.

My hands were getting sweaty, so I let go for a second to wipe my hand on my suit, then I did the same with the other.  There were only about eighty five people left, and I needed to survive until seventy five.  So close.

More people had started to do what Frenton was, so I could hardly stay on.  I was being shaken around so hard I thought my arms were being yanked off.  I had an amazing idea and wrapped my legs around the wire and locked my hands together on top of my crossed feet.  I ducked my head in between my legs and kept it there until the horn blew and the platform went back up.  My legs were wobbling and my arms were shaking, but I still had to walk across the thin platform without falling off.  I manged to make it, barely, off the platform.  I collapsed on the floor as soon as I got to the end.


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Awesome story. Pwz write more
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:) I will write more tomorrow cuz its late here same for The Mysterious Hero story <3 thanks
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on September 13, 2014
Sweet plot twist love it:D
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on August 26, 2014
sorry people! My everything has been down for waaaayyyyy too long! I'm going to write as fast . As I can and hope my English is still ok because I've been in Greece for too long!
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on August 14, 2014
Cool, write more.
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on August 12, 2014
Wow
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Ill take that as a "more plz" ?
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:D
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on July 12, 2014
Yup
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on July 12, 2014
Plz update soon I luv this story:D
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Thnx. Its just really hard to keep up with all my others stories as well. I'll try to update soon. :D @Aliyss
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on July 11, 2014
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on July 11, 2014
O my god u r such a good writer
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AWWW! Thank you soooo much! :D
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on July 08, 2014
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on July 08, 2014
Can't wait for the next chapter
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@Aliyss done another.
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on July 07, 2014
@Aliyss I did another chapter
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on July 07, 2014
That was amazing could you please wright more soon
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awwwwwww. thnx. more is coming soon. :)
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