this story is a thriller not suttabile for under 7 year olds it is about a girl who fell in love with a vampire and werewolf and they asked her out and they did not show up and then the next thing u know she went missing please read this shocking story
Victoria was asked by derek and tyler to go take blood away from claire her sis and tony her bro so she went back and returned of to the house and listened to the last word of her sis and bro then sucked the blood out of them with her red bloody lips they were never too be seen again R.I.P Claire and R.I.P Tony then she walked back to the forest with a sample of red cold blood .
It was good, just extend it a bit and add in some full stops! :)