Collection Of Poems I Have Created

Collection Of Poems I Have Created

No Plagiarizing! These are just poems I have made, love, hate, pain, fear, running, nature- you name it. Can't promise they are good, but I can promise they are near my personal best! Suggestions, Comments, Rates are all great! Rates spread the word of the story, and Comments help me improve!! Help me out- I'd love to become an author one day!!

published on April 23, 2013not completed

Trust is to Kite as...

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They say that the reason that
they don't let me do some things
is that I have proven distrustful.
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I run hard down the hill
hoping that the kite
catches the wind and soars
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They say that they take baby
steps so that I can gain
their trust in me
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The kite catches wind and
soars, keeping with in a few
feet, just within my reach
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They say that when I mess
up, they have to restart
the process over, taking longer
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The kite dips and does
twirls. I gasp as it take
sa sudden dive to the tree
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They say that it'll take
longer to gain the trust back
each time I screw up.
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The kite crashes down to
the ground. I fear it will hit
another object so I keep it near.
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They say that I may never
get that trust back, that
I may never be as privileged.
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The kite doesn't catch wind until I
loosen up the string and gently guide it
and it soars higher than ever.
~~~
They say- well who cares what they say.
I think that they just need
gentle guidance and a longer leash.
~~~
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P.S. put which poem you are talking 'bout XD
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on April 26, 2013
Thank you Clove and Wolfness- for the complements and for the critique. Yes, to wolfness, I do want critique, no matter how harsh :P And yes, I did have to cram a few words... I'm in a class where the teacher knows I can write, but compared to the others, my work is very well, yada yada so when I put this on here, I didn't really patch up those things I didn't See More
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on April 26, 2013
Very good, though, if you want critique, the rhythm is a little forced, as though you tried to fit in a bit to many words where there weren't enough syllables
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on April 26, 2013
You have amazing talent xD, good luck in the future - you are destined to be a writer!! :)
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on April 24, 2013
thanks guys!! Though, which one, Fleur? @.@
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on April 24, 2013
wow!
I thought that it was a great poem!
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on April 24, 2013
I loved it. It makes me think of an older couple with many years spent together. :3
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on April 23, 2013
Thanks! The 3rd and 4th lines I couldn't remember from my actual poem, the others were easy to remember cause they were my favorite XD (3/4 the poem, yeah I know)
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on April 23, 2013
Great! If you made the second part yourself, after forgetting, is amazing! You are wonderful with the poems you make. Great job!
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on April 23, 2013