Should this poem be completed Death  Is it more than just taking a final breath? Living Can you stop before your heart quits giving? Can it end when your heart begins to break  And your smile seems to turn fake Are you still alive  When all you feel is darkness inside?  Or instead  Can you clarify yourself dead  When you've soulfully gone numb   (Feed back positive and even negative would be wonderful!)

Should this poem be completed Death Is it more than just taking a final breath? Living Can you stop before your heart quits giving? Can it end when your heart begins to break And your smile seems to turn fake Are you still alive When all you feel is darkness inside? Or instead Can you clarify yourself dead When you've soulfully gone numb (Feed back positive and even negative would be wonderful!)

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tylnapp
Can you keep going ahead
When all you can see before you is what you may become
Will you behead this monster
Find the ever brilliant light that pulses
(Your poem explains what many people have gone through well, but also what some experience every day...it is good thus far, and continue it if you must)
E.M.P
Okay thank you. Your feedback means a lot
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tylnapp
No problem, I have not made poems before, so do keep that in mind when I give advice about them...I may not be the best..

Like that of a Fox giving lessons to a dog or wolf...similar....
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