http://www.qfeast.com/story/GDVYkw/Forestclan
Plz tell me what you think so far!
Plz tell me what you think so far!
Forestclan
Young Aquashine only memory of her birth clan is leaving and she seeks her history and what lies ahead in the future and find out about a prophesied cat before her named Silverflight for she is the only adult cat left from the previous generation with the villains known as darkclaw and lightclaw.
@Celest_Stories yes..I have been told the same by a few other experts. So im still working on that.
on January 01, 2015
As I am not very familiar with the WarriorCats series, I can't give proper advice on the story. Instead, I will give advice on the sentence structure and grammar. You had many run-on sentences, I advise that you quickly fix those because it's very hard to read a sentence that continuously goes on and on and on without a break, such as the sentence I had just See More written. It's also apparent that you've forgot to capitalize many names. One more thing, if I might add. When using dialogue, make sure that dialogue between characters is as such. (Because It's more appealing to the eye)
"Hi"
"Hello"
The story line and plot seem a bit rough. I believe this story can go far if you take the time to look over the things you've written. Always check over the work at least twice.
"Hi"
"Hello"
The story line and plot seem a bit rough. I believe this story can go far if you take the time to look over the things you've written. Always check over the work at least twice.
on January 01, 2015
on December 31, 2014
