Heartbreak Girl

Heartbreak Girl

Luke dedicates his life to Lauren, the one who never sees the truth. Okay, so this is technically a Luke Hemmings fan fiction, but you don't have to know who Luke Hemmings or 5 Seconds of Summer are to understand it, because I'm just going to write it as a normal story. I hope you like it!

published on June 22, 2014completed

The New Fan Fiction

The New Fan Fiction Okay, so the details about this new fan fiction.

The new fan fiction will be based on the 5 Seconds of Summer song, Try Hard.

For those of you who don't know, Try Hard is about the boys really wanting to go out with a girl and get her to like them, but she's out of their league, and they end up trying too hard each time.

It won't just be about one of the boys. Like, this was meant to just be a Luke Hemmings fan fiction (oops. :P ). It will be about each of the boys competing to get the girl to like them.

The chapters will alternate from each boy's point of view.

I'm planning on starting it soon. If you have any questions about it, just ask! :D
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This story reminds me of a fanfic I've been drawing...
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on August 05, 2017
:"> not:x
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on October 24, 2015
I'm sorry but y Ben and Jack? They're like my friends, and i used to have a crush on 1 of them.:x
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on October 24, 2015
No, I like how at first Lauren liked Ashton! It makes it more tense. :)
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You know, for Luke.
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I don't recommend shipping Ashton and Lauren X-(
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on July 23, 2014
And what do you mean Lauren's more attractive like that? :D
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on July 23, 2014
True, but I had to please the Luren shippers - especially @MockingjayDistrict, who would kill me if I didn't have a happy ending for Luren haha!! :D
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on July 23, 2014
Also, Lauren is even more attractive like that.
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on July 22, 2014
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on July 22, 2014
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on July 22, 2014
AWESOME!!! This story was lovely!!!!
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Aw, thank you so much!! :D :D
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on July 11, 2014
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on July 11, 2014
Can I have an OC if I'm not too late? If I can:
Name: Jocelyn
Age: 10
Appearance: 5 feet tall, color changing eyes, shoulder length brown hair, and lots of freckles across her nose under her eyes and on her cheek(face cheeks don't be weird)
Personality: A little weird, funny, kind, LOVES animals, LOVES video games, can be quiet and mysterious at times, and is See More
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I am so sorry, I am literally JUST about to finish this story!! :(( But I'll be starting a new fan fiction in a few days, maybe if you like that one you could create an OC? :D
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The storyline will be different though!! :D ;) You won't find out much about the girl's life and backstory in Try Hard. And anyway, you might not want an OC! You might hate it!! :D :D
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on July 11, 2014
LOL just put the same OC LOL :D
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on July 11, 2014
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on July 11, 2014
Poor Calum! :(( BESIDES THAT...
AWEEEESSSSOOOOMMMEEEEEDD
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Yeah, I know, right?? I feel so bad for Calum!! :( Okay, that's weird, because I'm the one writing it... :P Anyway, I'd like to know, do you think you would read Try Hard? :D
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Only about two. I actually have the ending all worked out!! :D
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on July 10, 2014
How many more chapters in this story?!
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on July 10, 2014
Yay!! Thanks!! :D :D
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on July 10, 2014
Yea!! Of course
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on July 10, 2014
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on July 10, 2014
AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME!!!
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Thank you!! :D Just wondering - will you be reading Try Hard? :D
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on July 10, 2014
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on July 10, 2014
WHAT?!?!
OMG PLZ PLZ GET TO THE END OF HEARTBREAK GIRL FIRST THOUGH!!!
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Yeah, of course I will!! :D :D There's still a few chapters left!! Would you read the new fan fiction, though?
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Thank you!!!! :D :D :D I'm planning on having completely new characters - except for the boys, obviously! ;) And a different story-line, of course! :D
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on July 10, 2014
OF COURSE I WOULD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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on July 10, 2014
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on July 10, 2014
Awesome chapter! This is getting intense OMG!!!! Thanks a ton fot mentioning me!!!!!!
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Haha, thanks!!! :D :D And like I said I mentioned all my most caring and dedicated readers, and you're definitely one of them!! :D You take it all so seriously!! And you're my Luren shipping buddy! ;)
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on July 09, 2014
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on July 09, 2014
AWEEEEEESSSSSOOOOOMMMMMMMEEEE
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Thank you!!!! :D :D
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on July 09, 2014
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on July 09, 2014
DA FEELS IN CHAPTER 20!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
And thank YOU for writing this story in the first place!!!
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Aw, thank you so much!!!! :D :D :D :D
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on July 09, 2014
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on July 09, 2014
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LUREN FOREVER!!!!!!!!!! THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WWWWWWWWWWWOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I'm so glad that you liked it!! :D :D
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Ur welcome
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on July 08, 2014
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on July 08, 2014
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on July 08, 2014
What happened to Ashton? They never broke up o.o
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But were they ever officially together? ;) You'll find out in the next chapter! :D
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You think you know what? Tell me in private message! :D
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on July 07, 2014
OMG i think i know... I'm not sure though
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on July 07, 2014
!!!!!!!!!! I WANT TO READ MORE NOW
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on July 07, 2014
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on July 07, 2014
OMG THEY'RE FRIENDS AGAIN AND THEY'RE TOGETHER WOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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on July 07, 2014
MOOORE! I'm so excited! :D
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on July 07, 2014
WRITE MORE PLEASE
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on July 07, 2014
I'm the only Ashton+Lauren shipper...
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X-(

NOOOO!
Luren shall prevail!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!
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on July 07, 2014
Haha, yeah!! :D Well, I kind of ship Ashren. But don't you ship Luren too???
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:(( Well, that's your own opinion!! :D And I'm so glad you have an opinion!! :D
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on July 06, 2014
I ship both i guess, but Luke is acting pretty self-centered
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on July 06, 2014
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on July 06, 2014
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on July 06, 2014
This is the best book i have ever read love it! And i whish Lydia kicked Callum out of her room with her heals
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Oh my God thank you so much!!!! And I'm very sorry that didn't happen!!
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Remember never say you aren't beautiful because pretty girls who do not know it are more attractive than Gorgeous girls who flaunt it:D Bye and UPDATE!:p
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on July 05, 2014
Haha, okay, bye!!!
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on July 05, 2014
Aw do not say that every one is beautiful in their own ways! Well i got to go and let's hope you updated more about me like way more and bye!!!!
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on July 05, 2014
Aw thanks!!!! :D :D But seriously, you don't know what i look like - I am SO not pretty!!!!! :O :O :O
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on July 05, 2014
Not in a lesbian way by the way:p
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on July 05, 2014
I know i am* Flips hair* Just joking! Well you are welcome dear anything for my dearest Author! You are so amazing and i think pretty:) I don't know why you are still single and do not have boys always following you around i am absolutely in love with your personality
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on July 05, 2014
Sorry, I just had to reference 5SOS. :D
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on July 05, 2014
OH MY GOD OH MY GOD I AM CRYING YOU HAVE ABSOLUTELY NO IEA HOW MUCH THAT MEANS TO ME THNK YOU SO SO SO MUCH YOU'RE JUST TOO NICE!!!!
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on July 05, 2014
Why wouldn't i? This is the most Amazing story i have read in my entire life and even when i am thirty and have children i will make them read it:)
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on July 05, 2014
Ah thank you thank you thank you THANK YOU!!!!!! You're so kind!! I'm honoured that you read this - and actually like it!!!
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on July 05, 2014
Yay! You are such a caring Author always thinking about your reader's feelings and thoughts:D
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on July 05, 2014
I'm thinking of including as many of the OCs as possible in the next chapter! :D
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on July 05, 2014
Can Lydia BE IN IT MORE PLEASE?
Sorry for Caps Lock:p
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on July 05, 2014
Haha, thanks!! :D And yeah, Luren is the most popular ship!! :D :D
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on July 05, 2014
It is aright but i like your idea so much better! And noh my god i really Luve Luren!
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on July 05, 2014
Write more quickly, you must fix this mess I call Luren!!!!!
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Haha!!! :D I'll try my best!
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on July 05, 2014
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on July 05, 2014
OMG OMG WRITE MORE THIS IS AWESOME MORE MORE WRITE WRITE QUICKLY
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Aw, thank you so, so much!!!
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on July 05, 2014
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on July 04, 2014
OMG chapter Tobiasteen is killing me!!!!!!
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Haha!! :D Just checking, you mean it's good, right? ;)
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Okay that was weird :P
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on July 03, 2014
Yay!! :D I really loved the idea!! :D Now the Luren ship is sailing along in the Ashren sea...
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on July 03, 2014
Yeah, I love it!
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on July 03, 2014
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on July 03, 2014
I WANT TO CRY FROM READING CHAPTER 14!!!!
THAT IS SO SWEET!!!!
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Aw, thank you!!! :D :D :D
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on July 03, 2014
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on July 03, 2014
Omg!!!! I actually ship Ash and Lauren though :/
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LUREN FOREVER!!!
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LOL
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on July 03, 2014
No, I just guessed. ;)
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on July 03, 2014
Was I that obvious? :P
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on July 03, 2014
I see that you weren't happy with that comment!! ;)
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on July 03, 2014
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on July 03, 2014
I think you're like the only Ashren shipper haha!! :D Well, I kind of ship it. :D
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Lol! I know! :D
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on July 02, 2014
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on July 02, 2014
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on July 02, 2014
Hey guys! Well my dear friend the person who made this story allowed me too make a roleplay about it and i will ver soon hope you join the role play!
Famous aurthor is out now! bye and if you want me too follow you write something to my wall or follow me i always follow back by the way
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on July 01, 2014
Yay you posted why Ella hates Lauren! And you included my reason! Now, let me get back to shipping Luren...
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Haha!! :D I loved your reason, so I just had to include it! And shipping Luren is a full-time job, isn't it? Not as easy as it seems!! :D
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Haha, it's awesome!!
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on July 01, 2014
Yup! *ship ship ship ship* Ship sliding away, ship sliding awaaaaaaaaay, I'll forever be shipping Luren and now I'm ship sliding away... (LOL that was a parody I came up with on the spot to Slip SLiding Away)
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on July 01, 2014
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on July 01, 2014
But, Lauren actually is nice...
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Haha!! :D I'll tell you in private message! ;)
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on July 01, 2014
Wait, what? Explain further!!!!!!!!!!! Wait, did you just do a... RICK HANGER?!?!?!?!
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on July 01, 2014
No, poor LAUREN! :D Ella isn't alone, she has her family and friends...oh, wait, her family hates her and she has no friends. I guess she is alone! :D
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on July 01, 2014
Wow... poor Ella.
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on July 01, 2014
Yeah, she's genuinely that sweet. But Ella is desperate for a reason to hate her, so she convinced herself that Lauren is actually awful and out to get everyone.
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on July 01, 2014
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on July 01, 2014
You have 105 reads! WRITE THE TEASER NOW LADY!!!!!!!!!!
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Haha I'll do it as soon as possible!!
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on June 30, 2014
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on June 30, 2014
OMG!!!!!!! I know what happpeeennnss.... I think. :-O
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Private message me your theory!!
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on June 30, 2014
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on June 30, 2014
Luren is a great ship name for Luke and Lauren!
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on June 30, 2014
Wait, I think I know why Ella hates Lauren: She knows Luke likes her, and is mad that she is so COMPLETELY OBLIVIOUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (Note the all caps part).
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Haha, good theory!! :D No spoilers yet, though!
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It will be revealed in the teaser!!
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on June 30, 2014
AM I RIGHT OR LEFT?!?!
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