Unforgiven

Unforgiven

I died yesterday. I'm not accepted into heaven. But I still have a chance to get in. Why I'm not accepted, you ask? I died doing bad. I died killing my best friend. If that makes any sense. I must prove myself worthy by doing good. But not just any good deed. I must be sent back in time, to stop myself ever meeting my best friend and stop myself from being over powered by greed and manipulation.

published on October 12, 2014not completed

Back To My Past, Part 2

Back To My Past, Part 2
I hurry over to where Eli stands.
"You ready?" Eli asks.
"No," I reply.
"Too bad, anyway, stand here," Eli motions next to him with his hand.
He wants me to go there.
I go there.
"Good luck, I'll see you soon," Eli tells me. Wait, what?!
"Hey wait! Don't I get any instructions or something?!"
"Nope, see ya," I look frantically around me as white flashing light surrounds me like a blanket. I shut my eyes. Then, I'm gone.

I'm breathing heavily. My heart racing. I open my eyes. I'm outside my classroom from two years ago, when I first arrived in England. That means I must be fourteen, I still feel sixteen. Wait, that means...
I place my hands on my head, yep, got my old glasses. I don't need them when I'm sixteen, but I needed them at this age. I look down at my junior black and white uniform. I remember this. This is amazing. I can't believe I'm back here.

I slowly make my way into the classroom.
"H-hello? I'm the new s-student," I stammer. I look around. I remember this. Wait. Who's she? She wasn't here before. She has sleek, neat, shoulder length black hair, as dark as the crows that do fly. Pitch black eyes, like a black hole, bringing fear to all around. Junior uniform with a dark grey jacket slung over.
'Their appearance, black hair, black eyes, grey clothes,'
You've got to be kidding me. The girl notices me and smiles...wickedly...evilly.
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Beautiful simply marvelous!
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on March 23, 2016
Awesome!!
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on December 10, 2014
Love. Love. LOVE IT! :)
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on December 10, 2014
Really awesome! Some minor spelling mistakes, but great writing!
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Yeah, I noticed them but haven't had time to go through and fix them. :)
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on December 09, 2014
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on December 09, 2014
Yay!! :D
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on December 09, 2014
Awesome new update! Write more soon!
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on December 08, 2014
Write more!!!!!!
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on October 20, 2014
Awesome! (Yes! I finally read it! ;) :P )
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on October 20, 2014
Love it
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on October 18, 2014
Write more soon!
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on October 15, 2014
Dark, but seems like an interesting plot!
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on October 14, 2014
I like it :) it's different write more!
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on October 12, 2014
Dark but cool
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on October 12, 2014
Too dark for my taste
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on October 12, 2014
AMAZING!!!!!!
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on October 12, 2014