A Knight's Cry

Liam, a knight finds himself avenging his family with someone he never knew before. Liam must fight through the pains and fear of the mission. [Thanks for Reading! Please give Feedback!]

story.writer published on September 25, 2015not completed

And Be Strong!

        "Welcome back!" shouted King Henry as they were approaching.
        "We did it, your highness!" Shouted Liam with joy.
        Liam ran over and kneeled before him.
        "Thank you for sending me on this mission." said Liam.
        "I knew you would like it." said King Henry.
        "We moved the people back here, under our rule." said Rose.
`      "Wonderful!" yelled King Henry.
        Then, Liam went out to the balcony and saw everyone cheering!
        "Thank you!" yelled Liam.
        "Wonderful job, Liam." said Rose.
        "Where are you going?" asked Liam.
        "I have to do other missions." said Rose, motioning a kiss.
        Rose teleported away.
        "Thanks again, your highness." said Liam.
        "Where'd Rose go?" asked King Henry.
        "She had to go. It was nice meeting her." said Liam.
        "Welcome back, Sir Liam!" yelled out King Henry to the crowd.

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story.writer The Jbone published on September 25, 2015

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vive_la_revolution

I LOVE that you actually have good grammar. That's surprisingly hard to find on here. However, I feel like there could be some improvements in your writing as far as emotion, thoughts, feelings, descriptions, and flow are concerned. You need to be as into your writing at the time you type as you want the reader to be when they read. Also, are you really going See More