Clouded

Clouded

Cloud was wondering in moonlight valley when something struck her, will her pack take her back? Will her brother remember her, or was he there and is just pretending?.. Read to find out

published on September 17, 2016not completed

Chapter 6

Chapter five
Emptiness surrounded me with tension in the air. "She's going" I recognised the Alpha's deep voice. I looked at myself I had cuts all over me, they bleed but a few were blocked up by dried blood.Smelling the air I noticed I was at the edge of the territory. I licked my paws and put on an innocent face. "Alpha she's only a pup!" It was that guy from the other day, unless it was a few days ago. "Shadow she's to strong" so his name was Shadow  thanks not-so-good Alpha. Shadow growled at the Alpha "a battle eh? You know what made me Alpha right?" My eyes flickered open I stood next to Shadow Protectively even though I could do nothing. I skimmed the crowd for Night he was nowhere to be seen. My tail went down and my ears laid back as I growled the alpha just knocked me out. Everything was black.
-flash back-
The sun shone on me as I walked down into the den where my brother slept. I hunched down and crept up to my brother. I jumped on him and he yelped taken by surprise. I smirked happily "ughhh sis" he rolled his eyes at me and lay back down "wanna go and play?" I said dryly "of cause,I do" he replied sarcastically "ok.." I walked off my tail low, just like my feelings. The light seemed to dim.
-end of flash back-

Night's POV
"Night wake up " "huh?" The Alpha stood over me. I sniffed the air the alpha he'd just been with my sister I expected her to still be here. She wasn't. "Where's my sis" I said angrily "oh don't worry about her" the alpha said "she's out on a hunt, yes that's right, now let me give you a tour" he was obviously lying but I had to admit he was quick on his feet. "And I want you to meet Blaze"
We walked out to where the sun rose. A sandy coloured female wolf stood there "Blaze I'd like you to meet Night" "nice to meet you!" Blaze said as she sniffed my black fur, she smelt familiar, like I knew her. Her expression made me think she shared the same feelings.
The Alpha, and his mate took me around the place, I just tuned out what they said and thought, where was my sister? Why the sudden change?, it seemed every time a 'door opens' it closes right after. Trapped forever in an endless circle of misfortune.

Cloud's POV
I curled up my tail reaching my nose. The fluffy tip seemed somewhat comforting. I checked again over my fur I had a few specks of sandy peach against the grey although my body had been thrown around like a seal playing with its food. Covered in scratches like the bite marks of a seals teeth. I had know where to run, know where to hide. I just sat there, thinking all the while wondering what was happening back in the pack...

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Authors note
Hoi~! It's me Chara, I know this may be short I wrote in notes when I had no internet, but if you read this please go read my new book!, it is called: Hurts to smile..
It's about Raven and her doll, everyday people make the fire in her mind grow although she doesn't speak much. I found it greatly enjoyable and descriptive plus it took me a while to write it ^-^ take care, -Chara
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Name: Shadow
Age: Young adult she-wolf
Rank: Lone wolf
Back story:
Shadow has lost her pack to another vicious pack of wolves. She is the only survivor. In fact, she is very wary around other wolves but gets along well with foxes. Her best friend is a silver fox named Marko. See More
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on February 17, 2021
Name: Skorlün
Age: Adult Wolf
Their distinguished achievement that made them Alpha: Reunited a broken pack, and recruited some oddities.
BackStory:
Skorlün was raised by an Omega, and a Rogue packmember of the Bramble Leaf Pack. His Mother, the Rogue had killed her own pack members while defending her den. She was of a near midnight black pelt, with razor sharp See More
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Alpha Form...

*Had a longer form...but Qfeast comment limitations...*
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on December 12, 2016
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on December 12, 2016
Hope you liked the last chapter I try to work on it as much as I can but I don't really have time anyway if you're here pleas please please go read Enchanted by the night it really good I promise!!! And it's the first time I wrote a story From readers view (I don't know what I'm saying lel)
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on December 12, 2016
Hoi~ to all those reading this, I just want to say thank you for all the to forms and that sorry I haven't uploaded a chapter to this book
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It is alright, you write well, and writing takes necessary time.
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on October 15, 2016
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on October 15, 2016
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on October 14, 2016
My oc Misty has had black magic as a power since I joined Qfeast Months ago....But it's okay Misty can be around before Cloud was So it doesn't bother me much...When Misty dies, she gives her power to someone else..
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on September 23, 2016
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on September 23, 2016
Name: Indigo
Age: Adolescent fox
Rank: Explorer/medic
Backstory: Her dad, Forest, ate poisonous berries and went insane. He killed Indigo's mom, Moon. Forest then abandoned Indigo. However, Indigo got struck by lightning and developed the power to knock somebody out just by aiming a paw at them.
Power: Can knock someone out by pointing at them with a paw See More
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Thanks so much!, I'm sorry I can't post the next chapter I've been really busy
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on September 22, 2016
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on September 22, 2016
An Alpha form..?

Name:
Age:
Their distinguished achievement that made them Alpha:
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I thought this may have been required...as I saw an earlier post that stated you required an Alpha form...but it seems I may have been mistaken...sorry if I was...
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Alright...thanks.
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on September 25, 2016
It's ok, but this form is aw some! You can fill it in to make an alpha if you want :D
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on September 23, 2016
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on September 22, 2016
Also I need more characters it's hard making them up on my own :'(
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on September 21, 2016
Btw if you don't like what I have done so far with your characters then please tell me and I'll change it :)
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on September 21, 2016
Name: Tilan
Age: Young Adult Fox
Rank: Sapper (Trap maker and such)
Backstory: Born to a small family below an oak tree within the small Oak forest, he was first out of three children to be born. He grew up doing things he had seen many two-legged creatures doing, using a strange herb that was long and thin, but strong enough to lift himself with enough of the See More
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on September 19, 2016
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on September 19, 2016
E.g.
Name: Cloud (CloudedMoon)
Age : pup
Rank: none yet ( alpha m/f, medic, so on)
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on September 18, 2016
I just wanna say a big thanks to all you guys who commented on my story, it really boosts me to write more, and to know that someone is actually reading it, so I'm here to ask if you guys want o be in the story, if so then just type up a RP form for your animal, I'd suggest to go with a wolf or a fox
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on September 18, 2016
This looks good thus far.
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on September 17, 2016
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on September 17, 2016