Phases of the Moon

Phases of the Moon

The little boy Magik's last memory was his mom tucking him in to bed. Now he is awake and in a strange place he has never seem before. Is he asleep? And what is with the moon?

published on April 12, 2014not completed

wait a minute... what was with the moon?

wait a minute... what was with the moon?
Magik: *wakes up 78k* 78k! the moon is... BLUE!!! 78k: what?! I think it was white like always. Magik: I have a picture of it! *shows picture* 78k: by golly! it IS blue!!! I couldn't see the blue but it is! that is weird! Magik: what does it mean? 78k: we must ask W12. he is wise. Magik: hurry up! *pulls on 78k* both: *walk over to W12* 78k: hey W12! W12: greetings 78k. what brings you to my home? have you a question that needs urgent answer? 78k: yes. what does a blue moon mean? W12: very hard that is. answer now I cannot. please later come back for answer of question. 78k: okay. let's go home Magik
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Good story but a little 2 fast into things.
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on April 13, 2014
(BTW i am following u)
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on April 12, 2014
good story, but needs editing. (look at punctuation, dialogue, and try to explain the escape more) don't worry, it has a good plot-line, so you wont need to work on that too much. if u need my help, i will help you. i edit my stories all the time, and i'm rewriting one of them, so don't feel bad. :p u got this!
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on April 12, 2014
okay. thanks for the feedback! now I will try to make it better in the future ;)
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on April 12, 2014
It's cool but a little too fast-paced. I didn't understand.
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on April 12, 2014